noha ( F P C D )
at 2008-05-03
Waw perfect love poem and you got pure love inside your heart,but let me say that why you love and think it isnt work ,why we love and let go,we cant forget and we willnt but if you realy love you have to try more ,its not the best for anyone to let go but it hurt and break hearts ,i live the same as he thought if he gone a way its better for me that i deserve better,but i dont want better i just want him,if you realy love dont lose it.
and for the poem its great in flow and beautiful words you got there,all of it my favorait,keep your love and keep write.5/5
[ Praised by : Daniel Mulvany ]
Britt ( F C D )
at 2008-05-04
Oh wow.
You had me completely wrapped in with your poem...but that last little paragraph of your questioning..thats what moved me to tears.
"I'll never be good enough for her, and am perhaps too afraid of rejection to try."
You never know what can happen until you try. If you face rejection, you move on never asking 'what if I tried?'. You'd be surprised at what you can do.
"Is it stupid to know a person 2 days and not be able to stop thinking of them and the what ifs?"
I think I do this all the time. It's almost refreshing and tormenting all at once..haha.
Now to the actual poem:
"To cast into an unforgiving sea."
This line is the one thing I read aloud in my head over and over as I re-read this piece. Theres something so eery yet calm about it. I love the 'unforgiving sea' part..it just..I guess I can't really describe it.
Your poem and the last paragraph kind of contradicts yourself..haha. The poem sounds like someone you've been with for a while, maybe in an on again off again type of relationship..but now you have to physically go. Then the paragraph goes into seeming like you just me this person.
Now I'm starting to ramble..haha. I love this piece. That sums up everything I just said :]
[ Praised by : Daniel Mulvany ]
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