Comments - A war between my heart and mind

contemplating spontaneity ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-12

I can relate SOOOOO much. i love the poem, ur really talented. please comment on one of my new ones, thanks

Singing in the Rain ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-13

This first part really drew me in:

"Every time I see your eyes,
my heart skips a beat.
When you laugh at what I say,
my body fills with heat."

Great job, I don't have any suggestions, it was all enjoyable to read. Hope to read more, take care and keep writing!

AblissfulDREAMER ( F C D ) at 2008-04-13

This poem relates to exacty what I am going through now. My mind and heart are in constant conflict with should I let him go and give up or try harder. The battle is quite intense but the emotions are so real that you just want to release your passions. Beautidul write my dear *5/5*

Stuart Brown at 2008-04-13

Well done, truly a work of art.

Yumi at 2008-04-13

Wow, kinda explains wat im goin through now, it was a great poem

Livi at 2008-04-13

I know what you mean, great poem

sweet escape ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-16

This poem sounds a lot like a school girl crush, for if it were true love you would just want him happy even if your not in his future.

it was strongly writen and i could feel the conflict of your heart and soal.
5/5

SlaveToTheMusic ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-18

I liked this piece simply because I think many people can relate to this in their own way.

One tongue-tied sentence after the next,
my mind becomes dumb, forget it all.
Rolling eyes think back to conversations,
but when you look at her I feel so small.

I loved the stanza above because it was so full of emotion and really deep. One thing I did not like though was the word dumb. I feel like it through off the meaningful emotion behind it. When I read it the first thing that came to mind was no. It just didn't match or fit together at all. Still a lovely stanza.

Overall another nice love poem. ~mel