Cindy ( F P C D )
at 2008-05-18
Rob
Only you can make one weep for a love of our dreams.
Gentle winds trail behind her to smell her sweet perfume
and the beauty on her face shames the rose's bloom.
Jealous clouds start weeping over a lady this soft and fair,
sad their moon sends it's rays to caress her raven hair.
How beautifully breathtaking this verese is. The imagery is awesome.
Stars all sit impatient to see the sparkle in her eyes
and if by chance she smiles, all dance in the sky.
The sun waits for the dawn to shine upon her soul
pulling from it's strength in order to feel whole.
The love you speak of here is a magical love. I love the way you use the stars and the dawn to describe the joy this love brings.
I pinch my arm in dreams for I fear this is not true,
loving simple men like me ladies do not do.
My eyes will open up, so afraid it was a dream,
so I pray this morning it is the way it seems.
Simple men are the best ones :) I just feel in love with this verse. It reallly spoke to my heart. Your writing has a way of reaching so many hearts. Excellent!
Love Cindy
[ Praised by : debbylyn ]
Luanne ( F P C D )
at 2008-05-18
I pinch my arm in dreams for I fear this is not true,
loving simple men like me ladies do not do.
My eyes will open up, so afraid it was a dream,
so I pray each morning it is the way it seems.
^^^
Such a soul touching ending my friend!
Gentle winds trail behind her to smell her sweet perfume
^^^
I love this opening line .... it creates such amazing imagery and opens the poem fantastically.
Another great read my friend
Luanne
[ Praised by : Cindy ]
Lisa A Kessler
at 2008-05-18
Another great job! I have to read your poems every night before going to bed. This is finals week for me, so I won't get to read agin until Fri.
Lisa
Sarah ( F C D )
at 2008-05-18
Hi Rob,
A very passionate piece,
The last verse:
I pinch my arm in dreams for I fear this is not true,
loving simple men like me ladies do not do.
My eyes will open up, so afraid it was a dream,
so I pray each morning it is the way it seems.
Beat me to the end, well written.
[5.5]
Keep writing!
Sarah
debbylyn ( F P C D )
at 2008-05-18
Wow! Awesome and beautiful tribute to a special someone that seems can only be written by a heart in love! Soft and soothing...beautifully romantic and brilliantly penned!
"I pinch my arm in dreams for I fear this is not true,
loving simple men like me ladies do not do.
My eyes will open up, so afraid it was a dream,
so I pray each morning it is the way it seems."
^I've felt just this way after being blessed with my true love! An amazing tribute to a special someone and a love poem of the utmost perfection! 5/5
[ Praised by : Cindy ]
Anna Stephens ( F P C D )
at 2008-05-18
Ahhh, Rob
You never cease to amaze and delight. Beautiful, beautiful piece. Talk about water-works, wow!!!!
Blessings,
Anna
Side Effects ( F P C D )
at 2008-05-19
Another well penned piece from the master
5/5
Jen
a bleeding mess ( F P C D )
at 2008-05-19
My eyes will open up, so afraid it was a dream,
so I pray each morning it is the way it seems.
--favorite part
very nice poem
Raychil ( F P C D )
at 2008-05-19
Such a beautiful piece. I love the imagery, every detail. It was such a captivating work, every line so rhythmic. Absolutely stunning. This is perhaps one of my favorites, short and yet so sweet.
<3Raych
Rajib
at 2008-05-20
Nice, touchy, feelable
Glad to read it & lucky 4 ur sharing.
good luck
Rajib.
MissE
at 2008-05-20
I love this poem!!! WOW!!! for someone to think this highly of another being, and be able to write it so beautifully!!!! well done!!! EXCELLENT!!!!
Barry ( F C )
at 2008-05-21
Simple man....with depth....and a heart
Excellent poem with a line that just runs
and runs....
charlie ( F )
at 2008-05-21
Wow just wow tears ran down my cheeks with this poem it really touched me :) good job :) 5/5
Rachel ( F P C D )
at 2008-05-22
Vivid imagery in this romantic piece. You always have a way with words. Nice job!
xdarkeyesoldierx ( F P D )
at 2008-05-22
Wow, that is amazing. The rhymes are perfect to me, and it all flows so well together. Very well-written, and one of the best poems I've read recently. Excellent poem.
5/5
waiting 4 some1 ( F P C D )
at 2008-05-23
Wow
such description, really amazing, each line shows alot. you just wrote an amazing poem that shows how much you love that person. am sure she is lucky to have you and so you are to have her in your life
Mohamed ( C )
at 2008-05-24
Rob....
WoW, AM amazed by the amount of emotions put into this master piece,
Gentle winds trail behind her to smell her sweet perfume
the beauty of this line in specific is that i was able to visualize it, that line actually took me away to wonderland :))))
Gooooood Job ..... Mr. Rob !!! it rhymes huh :))
Mohamed ( C )
at 2008-05-28
Seriously, man this is an amazing write, the way u just use very simple yet sweet words so descriptively amazes me,
"Gentle winds trail behind her to smell her sweet perfume"
I know that its not fair to choose a favorite part out of such a wonderful poem but i just felt like visualizing this line, it took me to wonderland :)) ,
GREAT JOB, Billy Rob :))
Jenna Kaye Stephens
at 2008-05-30
I'm not going to write out the verses I liked like everone else, because I simply love it all! Your profile says that there are many better than you, but you are defintely extremly talented! I love your poems! Keep em' coming! Best luck to you...Jenna Kaye Stephens
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