Comments - When

Heart Break Kid ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-10

This is a really good poem i liked it alot

debbylyn ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-10

Beautiful mixture of love and nature Kay! So tranquil and serene....brings a smile!

'Stars reflected in placid lakes
No longer dance in mallards wakes"

^love this couplet! Nicely done!

Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-10

Kay
What a beautiful poem of love you have penned. The imagery is awesome.


When summer sun bids goodnight
Winged creatures have ceased in flight
Stars reflected in placid lakes
No longer dance in mallards wakes

The picture your words paint for the mind make me feel as if I'm seeing all this right in front of me.


When rapids tire of rushing race
Carvings weathered from stones face
Etched for Eternity two souls together
My love for you ...sincerely, forever

I loved the entire piece Kay. This is a forever love you write about. Gives such a feeling of peace. Just want to stay and relish in the feeling.
Excellent!
~Clapping~
Love Cindy

Sourav ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-11

Awesome... A brilliantly write poem. The last stanza is outstanding. What a beautiful poem of love!

Healing Spirit tpfka Broker ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-11

Kay,

I loved every word of it, it is the perfect gift of love:)
Thanks for sharing this with the rest of us!

Love, Ingrid

MELI at 2008-06-12

Ii REALLY LiiKED THiiS POEM! iiT KiIND OF REMiiNDS ME OF SHAKESPEARE ... ii LiiKED iiT AND iiT WAS EASY TO UNDERSTAND FOR ME... GREAT JOB KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK..=]

Marian ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-12

It is indeed a very well-written poem... The serene ambiance, coupled with aesthetic imageries of the natural world and interminable devotion of lovers, engages the reader in an ethereal realm rooting only in the Mind's Eye. A pleasure to read, nonetheless!

moonlil ( F P C ) at 2008-06-12

Wow, that's a very nice poem. It flows great. Good job.

Nz0 ( F C D ) at 2008-06-13

Absolutely wouderful poem =)
the imagery and descriptive writing wer so well blanded with ur great message at the end. 5* easliy

Kayli ( F C ) at 2008-06-13

Wow that was absolutely FLAWLESS! 5/5 i love the flow and effortlessness of this poem! keep it up :)

Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-16

Congrats on the win Kay.....This is a beautiful poem :)
~Clapping~
Love Cindy

Ashley ( F P C ) at 2008-06-19

A beautifully written poem. one of the best i've ever read. yer a wonderful poet!

Cincinnatus ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-20

It all fitted excellently together, you have a real talent for painting pictures

your servant:
D. Johnson.

Crow ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-21

Beautiful hun...the imagery and the ending almost made me cry.. you're a very talented poet = )

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Edward D Zurovec ( F C D ) at 2008-06-22

Beautiful Love Poem DD. The words just roll off the tongue, of course I've read it over and over to soak the Poem in. That last stanza is awe inspiring

When rapids tire of rushing race
Carvings weathered from stones face
Etched for Eternity two souls together
My love for you...sincerely forever

A fast moving young couple, who have grown together over many years, older and wrinkled now, dedicated to each other for an Eternity.
A wonderful metaphor.
Peace and Blessings

GrammaConcept ( F C ) at 2008-07-15

Very nice....and truly, quite romantic...

reminds me of the lyrics a terrific vintage song:

"...In time the rockies may crumble,
Gibralter may tumble,
they're only made of clay but,
our love is here to stay..."

EmoPrincess ( F P C D ) at 2008-07-21

Wow, this is so amazing
this is one of my favourite poems, no doubt about that

Ana at 2008-07-27

Omgoshi really like this poem , its beautiful

Sylvia ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-08

A wonderful way to express love for someone.

ben thompson ( F P C D ) at 2009-02-03

Outstanding write, beautiful word usage. i positively loved it. 5/5 all the best ben thompson