Breaking Dawn ( F P C D )
at 2008-08-17
This is really good, the way you wrote this was very unique.
"*you are my silence*
*I am yours*
*together we won't
(speak a word)*"
I love these lines, very sweet! Good job throughout this poem, you did very well. Keep writing, always and forever...
Annaam ( C D )
at 2009-02-02
WOw... This is something different and very well-done! Again, perfect rhyming. The expressions are strong.
``*you are my silence*
*I am yours*
*together we won't
(speak a word)*
--> Flawless!
``You have me here on pause but I can see what's going to be played
And yet I'm fine while stuck in pause 'cause I don't want to face the change;
Don't want to let this day go by and, along with it, you as well;
I'm fine pretending as the ground comes near
{I never}
(even)
[fell]
--> I love this one too. The usage of words is excellent and you've built it up very well!
In the end, another amazing write.
5/5!! :)
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