Comments - Love In The Form Of A Wrecking Ball

CourtneyyContageous ( F P C D ) at 2008-07-22

Take my heart and hold my hand,
you're the only one who understands.
But you know that my heart has been broken,
so this love has to stay unspoken.

^^Great opening Stanza. CAptured me from the start. Secret love is mysterious, and it always intrigues me.

You're everything I've ever looked for,
and these feelings I cannot ignore.
I feel so lost that it feels like I'm in a maze,
I want you to find me; I can't count the ways.

^^This stanza was well written, general good flow. I'm sure many can relate to the lost feeling of love.

You are perfection at it's very best,
no one compares; there is no contest.
Every time you look into my eyes,
you're able to remove my disguise.

^^ My personally favorite staza of yours. I've never been able to disguise love,as well as you just did.

Only you can break down this wall,
it's love in the form of a wrecking ball.
I can only hope that you can see,
I love you; can you say you love me?

^^A perfect ending, to a perfect beginning. Well written, and you have a very wam feeling to this poem. 5/5

Leap Of Faith aka Temps ( F P C D ) at 2008-07-22

Perfect. Consistant rhyme and smooth flow. I think alot can relate to have such feelings towards someone like you do.. I especially loved the last stanza..
"Only you can break down this wall,
it's love in the form of a wrecking ball."
-Very unique lines, I loved the way they were worded. (:

Overall, this poem I can relate to. Wonderful write, my dear. :] Keep up the great work! 5/5.

SilentSuicide ( P C D ) at 2008-07-22

I like the rythem in this one. very classy. good job.

Kail ( F P C D ) at 2008-07-23

I love the first line. It was so cute. And I felt that the ending tied the whole thing together very nicely. The rhyme and flow both, seemed effortless. It felt like you put alot of thought into this poem, and it really shows. I really liked it.

AblissfulDREAMER ( F C D ) at 2008-07-23

Wow I just loved this title. It captured my attention and made me curious to read the poem. The meaning behind you words were easy for me to understand because I know whats it like to be in that position. You expressed yourself very well and overall the poem was just a joy to read. The flow was great and noting seemd to be forced to rhyme.

"Every time you look into my eyes,
you're able to remove my every disguise."
^This line touched me because it was so pure in emotion.

Well done. *5/5*

amanda jo ( P ) at 2008-07-24

Amazing! this poem was nicely written and flowed together. i love it. i can really relate. would love to read more. keep it up! XD!

BroknHeart ( F D ) at 2008-07-25

WOw...i really enjoyed this piece!!! It flowed beautifully!! And I can really raelate to the meaning! Def a 5/5!! :)

caitlin at 2008-07-26

What a great poem =)
I would rate you 10/10.
keep up the good work =D

Skyfire ( F P C ) at 2008-07-27

I really liked this...it almost sounded lyrical. Like it could be put to music.

4 track demo ( F C D ) at 2008-08-10

Very smooth, and well written..
nice rhyme and meter. and the message was portrayed well, good job, cant pick out a favorite part...it was all good..
very nice..
john

Jaimee at 2008-08-13

Excellent poem!
Loved every bit of it.
=] 5/5