Comments

Jennifer ( F P C D ) at 2008-08-12

Right from the first stanza I love it. I like how you turned questioning beauty into it being within you possibly.

As my eyes follows the shooting star,
follow*

I wish that I no longer have any more heartaches,
That line is worded really funny. O_<

I grab for a the knife and become dead silent,
Many tears escape as I carve your name into the wall,
My hands twitch, as I scream I love you, a million times,
Only if you could hear it,

This is really great imagery.

I really liked it. Five out of five.

forever falling tears ( F P C ) at 2008-08-16

This is amazing just amazing! just like i told her
can you not see this now
dont give up still fight , still fight. . .

mikxRawrr ( F D ) at 2008-12-22

This poem is brilliant. To be honest, and i'm not just saying this, But i can really relate to this. I've felt the same way. This is really great. 5/5

Keep up the good work!
love always,
mik :]

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