Goth marionette ( F P C D )
at 2008-08-16
Ur poem is so touchable..It was kinda short but I really enjoyed reading it:)
Keep up the good work...
Frenchy ( F P C D )
at 2008-08-16
Aww.. so sad..=( but i have been there as well.. it is simple again but it say a lot.. am here for you... I love it .Awesome job =)
Breaking Dawn ( F P C D )
at 2008-08-16
Beautifully written, I enjoyed reading this write.
"Visions of your rushed to my head"
your should be you.
"The last image I saw was you
It made me realize
All this time I was being true
You created my demise."
Great ending stanza, sums it up perfectly. Keep writing, always and forever....
xxBrOkEn2mAnYtImEsxx ( F )
at 2008-08-18
I LiKeD It iT wAs GoOd...i CoUld rElAtE
Grant Gilbert AKA Slash ( F P C D )
at 2008-11-17
Well thats a very lovely poem and your subject choice and metaphor choice was good i thought that matbe you could have stretched the idea a bit/used it a bit more but never the less it was still well thought out and executed.Well done
Grant
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