Comments

I BRUISE EASY ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-10

Wow, harsh...can totally feel the pain coming from this poem.

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Ed Henderson ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-21

Brilliant. The way you've put this together is fantastic! Starting it with lines that are short and precise, and ending it with longer, angrier lines brings each stanza a development in the relationship that builds a whole picture that I am certain will be frighteningly familiar to many here on this site.

I find many relationship poems on here rather tiresome and impersonal, but this... This is spectacular. You can be proud of this, make no mistake about it!

FallenFromGraceX ( F C ) at 2008-10-01

Another great write.

XBlueberrymuffinzX ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-23

I LOVED IT!! and i just added it to my favorites. This is brilliantly amaaazing! great work. 5/5

my tears never fall ( F P C D ) at 2009-02-05

I love th rhyme its good and the part about the string around the finger was really great 5/5

Cindy Mountain ( P C ) at 2009-06-29

WOW! Straight to the point...good one 5/5