Comments - Growing Old With You

Michael D Nalley ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-12

Wow that is a beautiful story and well written poem VERY POWERFULL

It would make a fine addition to the crowning touches of bereavement
5>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

lost in lovee ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-12

Amazinqq!
wow ii really loved it!
it was a super cute story and it was filled with lotsz of emotion.
my favortie part was
"But for this couple it was different,
Since day one it was meant to be,
It was that forever fairytale happiness,
The kind you can only see on T.V."

5/5 (:

Lost and Confused ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-12

I swear I'm in tears. Very beautiful story. So emotional too... The way it was written was astonishing. The flow was great, I loved the word choice, and the concept had me trapped. One of the best poems I've ever read. 5/5

Jenn at 2008-09-12

That was absolutely beautiful the love they shared till his dying day will forever be in her heart and you can feel it in the poem itself I got goose bumps reading it very well done 5/5

FaithHopeNLove ( F C ) at 2008-09-12

Awww...that poem brought tears to my eyes. Im sure its meant to be sweet, as it obviously is, but for me, it is also unbearably sad. They had everything. The kind of life every little girl dreams of. But all good things end. Its a beutiful poem. Without knowing the inspiration behind it, I can only guess it meant a great deal to you, or that you are a very talented writter. Perhaps both. Great job!

LockedInEternity ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-12

Wow.. what an amazing ending.
"of course princess i grew old with you" -- couldn't think of a better ending.
i had some trouble with the flow at time.. but perhaps thats cause i just read it differently than you pictured. One of the verses was out of the ABAB rhythm, so that threw me off.. its was the one where in the second line it said "best friend and wife" i think.. ill check again. i recall it being a ABCB tho.
The idea of the poem however was beautiful and incredibly clever. Emotions ran through each stanza and the feel of the whole poem gave me shivers ( the aww, thats cute kind - not the im scared kind) .
anyways. 5/5 -- i loved it.

BREE aw NUHH ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-12

Aw. This poem is so sweet. I loved everything about it. I feel like it was genuinely heartfelt. It almost brought me to tears. There is no doubt in my mind that this is one of the most beautiful poems I've ever read, so great job there. Also, your word choice was excellent.

Overall; Wonderful poem.

Five out of five. [5/5]

``Briana

Vox ( F C ) at 2008-09-13

Amazing... absolutely awe inspiring, you have captured that little dream that many of us have. to find that special someone and never let go. honestly im wondering if you have tried publishing this, or any other pieces that you wrote.

You captured the dream, well done... well done.

5/5

Sweet lig ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-13

Hmm it seemed, its real story, is it? well this is sounds so sweet but sad. the story was really great and very touching piece. i really enjoyed this kind of thoughts, great flowing of this words, i enjoyed alot. keep it up 5/5

Kellie ( F P C ) at 2008-09-14

A beautiful poem, it made tears come to my eyes. I love the story, I don't know whether to be sad because he died or happy because they found love. The last line was a great way to finish aswell. 5/5

xXxemzxXx ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-14

Omg i love this poem i will even admit i got all teary-eyed lol the storyline in the poem is great there is a lot of love showed through it as well and all different kinds of emotions just come out through this poem you worded it great and the flow was amazing 5/5

khobo ( P C ) at 2008-09-14

Such a sweet poem... loved it from beginning to end. It had a sad ending, but also a great one. It flowed nicely and liked how it was told as a story. It has some good imagery and good use of repetition. Nice work =)

Crystal Gaze ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-14

Oh Gosh!
That was... that was breathtaking. Jeeze you brought tears to my eyes. I love how you expressed it. It was a wonderful story, so sweet and touching.
Im at a loss for words.
All I can say was your piece touched my heart.

Keep writting.
5/5
-Elaine.

jojo ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-14

Oh. my. god. i have goosebumps from that poem...it was like unbeleivable!!! i adored it! when i read the title at first i thought it was the song from "The Wedding Singer" called grow old with you and then once i read it i was speechless this writing is g8!

StarGirl ( P C D ) at 2008-09-15

That was a very sweet poem but sad at the same time. I kinda got the impression of Wedding Singer too w/the title but I'm glad I was disapointed (even tho that song is cute too). I felt you expressed yourself with just the exactly the right words at the exactly iright time.

Mishka ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-16

...wow..... shivers...up and down my arms and legs and wow... this is so romantic. i am adding this to my favorites :)

this is simply amazing, sara is a very very lucky one. :)

i really hope your future is great and stay healthy.

beautiful poem. rhymes and flows magically.

lexie ( P C D ) at 2008-09-17

AWW!that was really sweet & it almost made me cry.
i loved the way you went through their whole life together & kept interest the whole way.
also liked how you repeated the part about tears falling from her big brown eyes.
really romantic & sweet. =]
LOVE IT!
--lexie

Supersonik Sliinky ( F P C ) at 2008-09-17

Aww that is beautiful. I could have cried. I loved it. The flow could improve in some places, for instance the stanza
"They bought a house and settled down,
Got pregnant and gave birth to a little girl,
How is it at just twenty-three years old,
They could have everything in the world."
could use some improving in flow, along with a couple of other stanzas

I love the way this poem was written, it's probably one of the best epic poems I've read on here lately. the rhyming was great and the word choice really fit the poem.

My favorite stanza was definately
"Tears falling from her big brown eyes,
It was a yes as she nodded her head,
And just seven short months later,
These two teenage kids were wed."
It really showed a turning point in the poem, and the flow was great here.

EXCELLENT JOB! (= 5/5

cowgirlstar26 ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-17

Omg!!! I hope my marriage will last that long and be that full of love.....sighs :) 5.5 I just got engaged so hopefully. really great write. I can't think of anything to say that hasn't been said by everyone else that's left a comment so I'll just stick with this. :) keep it up

cowgirlstar26 ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-17

Omg!!! I hope my marriage will last that long and be that full of love.....sighs :) 5.5 I just got engaged so hopefully. really great write. I can't think of anything to say that hasn't been said by everyone else that's left a comment so I'll just stick with this. :) keep it up


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