Healing Spirit ( F P C D )
at 2008-09-17
I borrowed wings from an angel
to fly high
and gripped the moon
to guide me.
^^^^ Woo-eeee girl, you made me smile so bright! I so love this poem, your wording and everything!
Samia, you are one of P&Q's rising stars!!!!
(((big hugs)))
Much love, Ingrid
NoUr ( F C D )
at 2008-09-17
Amaaaaaaaaaaazing...but that's the same with all ur poems apparently, beautiful imagery...
I borrowed wings from an angel
to fly high
and gripped the moon
to guide me.
^^beauuuuuuuuutiful...i imagine u flying up there with sweet wings and holding the moon as ur torch
Fog was dancing
around that impossible peak
^^that part too(actually the whole poem is lovely) nice how u personalized the fog as dancers and you made everything sound cheerful while actually they were blocking ur way...
The precious mission was done
when I found birds of heaven
and taught them
lifelong tunes of fondness.
^^OMG!! i'm speechless...u're kind personality is totally in ur poems
your poems are just as sweet as you are :) (you're sweeter actually)
keep it up soso..
mwaaaaaaaaaaaaah
HEBA ( F C D )
at 2008-09-17
Omg.I am speechless.It was really wonderrful and a powerful piece.I truly loved it,it was so delictae and breathtaking.I really loved your great and beautiful imagination too.
Nice poem samia.well done.keep it up.
Give you my vote.5\5.
Side Effects ( F P C D )
at 2008-09-19
You are showing more of your heart in this and I loved it
5/5
xx
Nema ( F P C D )
at 2008-09-19
Gameela awiiiii Masha'allah =)
I really like the romance in it, it's so sweet and full of passion
You're an amazing unrhyming poetess, I love how your lines always hold a music in the deep.
I loved the first line a lot, borrowing wings from angels, wow that was a new idea !!!
also starting the piece with these lines was great, impressive, capturing and mind-blowing ;)
lovely piece indeed
Im addicting your poetry <3
write on xxx
HvNxInsanity Embracedx ( F C D )
at 2008-09-20
It's so incredible how you use simple words and turn them into enchanting attractive words that entangle the reader and keeps him/her wanting more. This is a beautiful piece of work :]
5/5
keep it up hun,
Jon
Cindy ( F P C D )
at 2008-09-20
Soso
You have penned another beautiful piece. Wonderful imagery and word choices. Your words draw the reader inot your vision.
when I found birds of heaven
and taught them
lifelong tunes of fondness.
A piece composed
in a cadence of peaceful pleasure.
A harmony the whole universe
would repeat forever,
where every verse is written
with a warm breath,
you master its own rhythm.
I like the entire piece but this part just touched me.
Great work
Take Care
Cindy
Bassel Samman ( F P C D )
at 2008-09-21
Awesome imagery throughout, I enjoyed reading every line. As always, thanks for the great read, and Ramadan Mubarak. Eid Mubarak too, just in case I don't get to say it in time ;).
lostw1th0utlove ( F P C D )
at 2008-09-23
You had better write more XD Favorited
Weeping Wolf ( F P C )
at 2008-09-24
Wow, what a glorious poem! I loved it from beginning to end!
"Seas and Oceans
were left behind,
who needs them?
my own secure harbor
lies in your eyes."
My very favorite part...I read it over a couple times, it just really reminds me of how i feel sometimes, but you put it in words I could never find. Wonderful, and thank you for the comments on my poetry as well.
weepingwolf
Azzza ( F P C D )
at 2008-09-25
I really like the way u start and end ur poem...i must say tt u're a great poet
Breaking Dawn ( F P C D )
at 2008-09-26
A stunning piece of poetry, Soso, and you really captured such beauty in this poem. I really enjoyed this, and your work always seems to lift my heart, and of course touch me.
"A piece composed
in a cadence of peaceful pleasure.
A harmony the whole universe
would repeat forever,
where every verse is written
with a warm breath,
you master its own rhythm."
My favorite part, your word choice was excellent and had me entranced from the start to the finish. Definetly a 5/5. Good job, take care. Keep writing, always and forever....
Grant Gilbert ( F P C D )
at 2008-09-26
What a beautifull poem very peaceful, possitive and inspiring
when I found birds of heaven
and taught them
lifelong tunes of fondness
What a beautiful thought, I loved this poem it was so well written well done
Grant
Leap Of Faith aka Temps ( F P C D )
at 2008-09-27
"I borrowed wings from an angel
to fly high
and gripped the moon
to guide me."
`I really loved the usage of the word gripped here, the picture that I get from these first few lines are very beautiful. Wonderfully written nonetheless.
"Seas and Oceans
were left behind,
who needs them?
my own secure harbor
lies in your eyes."
`The question really caught my eye, it really got my attention, I loved the originality behind it. Oceans can be uncapitolized however.
"Fog was dancing
around that impossible peak
yet, I could reach there
the power of passion
within my heart,
made the white hallows disappear.
`This is such a beautiful poem. Word choice is outstanding.
Overall, wonderful write. Left me speechless pretty much. The word choice is fabulous, the flow is great. :] welll donee. (: 5/5.
*emmax* ( C )
at 2008-10-15
The poems is deep, thats how i feel!
"my own secure harbor
lies in your eyes"
i think it speaks of an intimacy where one finds solace and great strength, a place in love that completes and makes one content.
Profound.
kelleyana ( F P C D )
at 2008-12-02
I've not just seen your words with my eyes, nor does it only touches my heart, but it plays a wonderful music to my ears and puts me in the mood for listening. All i can say is you're one of those poet whom i've had lots of admirations for, keep it up, kel.
xLilMissFrostyx ( F P C D )
at 2009-02-26
"I borrowed wings from an angel
to fly high
and gripped the moon
to guide me.
Seas and Oceans
were left behind,
who needs them?"
^^ I adore these opening lines, the emotion and depth really pulls the reader into the piece and the imagery so far is beautifully painted, leaving vviid pictures in my mind.
However, I don't feel you need the "I" on the first line, or the "and," on the third line, I think it works better without.
"my own secure harbor
lies in your eyes.
Fog was dancing
around that impossible peak
yet, I could reach there
the power of passion
within my heart,
made the white hallows disappear."
^^What a beautiful way to carry the poem forward, the depth and meaning here is incredible, the emotion easily felt by the reader.
"The precious mission was done
when I found birds of heaven
and taught them
lifelong tunes of fondness."
^^I think it would flow better without the fillers, maybe :
Precious mission was done
when I found birds of heaven
Taught them
lifelong tunes of fondness.
"A harmony the whole universe
would repeat forever,
where every verse is written
with a warm breath,
you master its own rhythm. "
^^I really enjoyed the closing lines, filled with so much meaning and beautifully worded with a powerful finish.
Beautiful.
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