Leap Of Faith aka Temps ( F P C D )
at 2008-11-08
"Tangerine reflection on sapphire waves"
`This is soo beautiful Ann. Just reading the first line I can picture it so vividly in my mind.. that it makes me smile. :]
"Footprints meandering in the sand"
`Again, I can picture this so perfectly. I loved the word meandering, you don't hear that very often. But, I love it! It's unique. :]
Second stanza - I noticed had a great flow, I was quite impressed with how you hooked me from the beginning and now I can't stop reading, it flow so smoothly.
Third stanza - Wow! I loved this.. because it's something you always wonder in life when you are with someone you love. Beautiful.
Fourth stanza - the ending is so beautiful, I can picture the two kisses, soo romantic. :] A beach is the most romantic setting.
Very well done.
I could picture this very well in my mind. Very vivid images you put in the readers mind. :]
5/5
[ Praised by : Ann Marie ]
Sylvia ( F P C D )
at 2008-12-12
The images are so vivid that I could hear the roar of the ocean, waves washing against the beach, the seagulls. Your words put me there watching as the two young lovers on the beach under a full moon, shared a gentle kiss. The flow is excellent and the love story is soft and gentle and sweet.
A POETRY COMMUNITY
POEMS