Luanne ( F P C D )
at 2008-11-09
XD I loved your rhyme scheme in this piece!
Your word usage was quite impressive and painted amazing imagery ... especially in the stanza I am about to paste.
Spring bestowed blue summer bliss
Autumn stole with grey goodbye kiss
Left with naught but leaves to miss
Winter immaculate; turquoise amiss
^^^
I loved this stanza .... this was my favorite stanza ....
A tear's cadence upon a page
The lonely soul within its cage
^^^
But these were my 2 favorite lines.
Great read XD ....
[ Praised by : Cindy ]
Cindy ( F P C D )
at 2008-11-09
XD
Wonderful poem. Great imagery and word choices.
Pen to paper, a poet's hand
Traces thoughts to time withstand
Song of raven to grains of sand
Beauty from another's heartland
A tear's cadence upon a page
The lonely soul within its cage
As broken dawns try to assuage
Encumbered on the same bitter stage
These stanzas are beautiful....reminds me of something I read before.
Excellent job!
(((hugs)))
Cindy
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