sluvious ( F P C D )
at 2008-12-11
Not bad, but count the I's in this, they were necessary.....I liked the flow, it was a contious story...it's obvious you have talent, now improve it.....thanks for sharing...4
Paul Hirst ( F P C )
at 2009-08-07
Great poem mate, very well written, it made me have goose bumps, well done, xP
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