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xLilMissFrostyx ( F P C D ) at 2009-02-14

"Let our souls soar
To the heavens,
Let them open every door:
Our love does the same."

^^I found this opening stanza to be incredibly sweet, so adorable and filled with such passion that I can't wait to continue on.

"Gazing into your eyes
Sets my heart on fire.
Your love is my prize:
And boy, I'm addicted."

^^I'm finding this to become better and better as I go along, the intensity and depth here is beautiful.

"White satin ruffled,
Black tuxedo smooth.
My words are muffled:
"I'll love you forever."

Our song keeps playing,
The night is young.
We keep on swaying:
Oh, I'm amazed by you. "

^^The imagery within these two stanzas is beautifully portrayed, it creates such beautiful visuals for the reader.

I loved the flow throughout, and I enjoyed this piece.

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