Something To Say ( F P C D )
at 2009-01-31
This had a very good message and you expressed yourself well here. You were just wanting her to understand you are still together with her, and you will be forever, but you just need some space to try to let things go that have been tearing you apart. Excellent write, good wording, and I enjoyed reading your latest piece. Take care and keep writing always and forever! 5/5 from me.
Poetess ( F C D )
at 2009-02-02
I thought this was cute! ;]
it happens in mostt relationships.
even i was going thru something like this. its a bad feeling, though, when the person you're with takes their anger out on you. =/
anyways this was a very sweet and thoughtful poem! 5/5
- Liz
Annaam ( C D )
at 2009-02-02
I don't think it's not the best poem ever written... :) The rhyming and flow is excellent! It's also very relateable.
``So I'm not dumping you, nor do I plan to now, or even ever,
I just need my space to deal with things that you can't kiss to make them better;
Understand my situation: school, my work, my family too,
and understand that even though I hate the world
I
Still
Love
You.
--> True feelings expressed. The end is perfect!
5/5.
Keep It Up! :)
Quintarae
at 2009-02-06
I like this it was cute. and i feel like dis sometimes and i kno my boyfriend can relate to it too. Nice work
HillaryNicole ( P C )
at 2009-02-06
That was jus..very sweet.
Simple & powerful
I love poetry like that
MyBloodRunsWithTheseScars ( C )
at 2009-02-07
Powerful.
JYOTI RANA ( F P C )
at 2009-02-09
Sorry if it heart you.
but i don't thing it is poem, In this nothing like poem. It just u are saying about your state of mind or mood. it is simply like paragraph.
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