Lawliet ( F P C D )
at 2009-02-09
Well I just feel the anger over your ex poured out into words. Well It sux to know that someone you love only wants one thing(sex)...and having going thru the times together only to find out that everthing was a fake. But from this experience, we can turn it into life's lesson.Well i hope you're ok now.
But a few suggestions:
I would capitolize all the 'I's &
correct the cos to cause
But other than that it was nicely written;)
Excellent Job
5/5
oX BlueberryMuffinz Xo ( F P C D )
at 2009-02-11
This was amazing! Loved this poem alot. And i can totalllllyyy relate. Every word you wrote down here hit me so hard! Very relatable piece. keep it up. 5/5 x
LavaGirl ( F P C D )
at 2009-03-01
I liked this poem because you captured your feeling of what this person did to you and you told him he is not needed. I like the emotion that you have put in this poem.
Well Done! 10/10
xoxoxoxo
LavaGirl
Nikki Stoner ( F P C )
at 2009-07-26
Amazing. =D Beautiful flow. 5/5. Keep writing.
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