Comments - I'm Not Crying

Kayl ( P C ) at 2009-02-11

I love this, good job, i can feeel the emotion

JP49 ( F C D ) at 2009-02-12

Love it !!!! really really ood jn on the poe keep it up and i might just add u as a fave :O lol

Rickilee ( F ) at 2009-02-12

I can totally relate to this.
Really, really good. :)
5/5!

xLilMissFrostyx ( F P C D ) at 2009-02-13

"Say all the words you want baby
But I'm not breaking down
Your words just bounce right off me
My tears are nowhere to be found"

^^Beautiful, beautiful opening here! The intensity and depth here is incredible, and pulls me right into the piece.

"You and I are over
That's road's already been paved
And it's too late for you to realize
What we had could've been saved"

^^I'm finding this piece to become better and better as I go along, with each stanza stronger than the last. I love the feeling of independency and of having moved on here.

"Now that your girl dumped you
You say you know how I feel
But don't expect my sympathy
'Cause you caught the raw end of that deal"

^^I found the flow to be of in the last line, whereas it's otherwise perfect throughout, maybe shorten it or edit it around?

"You're begging me to take you back
The tears running down your face
But the emotions have frozen within me
And I'm in a different place."

^^Again I love the feeling of being the stronger one, of finally standing up and saying you know what? I don't need you anymore!

"A place where I don't have to care
About how hard you're trying
And all I can think as I turn away
Is that for once I'm not crying"

^^I didn't like this stanza. It seems very weak whereas the rest of the poem is incredibly strong throughout. Maybe work on this stanza a little?

[ Praised by Inside the Liar | Approved by Italian Stallion ]

xxxWas It Worth It In The Endxxx ( P C ) at 2009-02-13

I know how u was feeling when i read through this..i have felt the same way..ive read alot of things on this site and this is probably one of the best....i really like this..its perfect 5/5

katie ( C ) at 2009-02-13

I love this poem. it speaks very stroung. i read it over and over and to me it has now flaw.

Lisa A Kessler at 2009-02-13

Fantastic!

AnCi ( F P C D ) at 2009-02-14

Omg!! This poem is absolutely FANTASTIC! =) AMAZING!

HeaVeNs Serenade ( F P C D ) at 2009-02-14

I know how you feel... this poem brought tears to my eyes... gerat job!

Lawliet ( F P C D ) at 2009-02-15

Wow I seriously like how you penned this poem. Yeah I think the guy deserve what he got...cause the way you wrote it... seem like when he choose you over another gal, he didn't he care much bout ur feelings...and now tt he's been hurt and knows how you have felt b4...he wants a second chance which he totally doesn't deserve.The ending was great to up up how u feel about him

Excellent Job
5/5

Emily ( P ) at 2009-02-16

Awesome flow.

Stephen ( F P C D ) at 2009-02-16

This poem is very well written, I felt the raw emotion as I read it, and you ended it very well.

You felt a sense of pride at the end, such as your standing up for yourself.. Very good very good 5/5

Joy at 2009-02-16

I can relate =|

nicole at 2009-02-16

Love it, 5/5