xXBurningxDesireXx ( F P C D )
at 2009-02-28
It feels like you're so far away
even though you're right here.
I feel like such a fool for love
when all it brings is pain and fear.
that what love is pain n love. it's strange for everyone who feels it. i like how u began in your piece here
It feels like I don't have you
even though I guess I do...
... it feels as if it's out of sync
-- the feelings that I have for you.
I love the first , two lines here. i feel the same way. having them with me but yet they aren't in a way. i wnt change a thing here.
I feel as if I'm losing
though you're telling me I've won...
as if I'm closer now to failing
than I was when I begun.
i think in love mean winning n losing. you gain their love, there hold but somehow u lost sumthing. it's hard to explain but u get me right? i suckat explain things.
I'm so afraid to lose you
though my heart is giving in
because although I really want you
I feel like I'll never win.
nicely done here. mi like it.
Nobody thought to warn me that I'd ever feel this way
-- as if I'm running in a circle while someone sprints far away.
OOO.. i love how you wrote this. amazing indeed
I just wanted to fall in love and now I'm wishing I did not
because it's easy letting go when you were never holding on.
So , so true here. it is. it's easier losing something you never had.
I'm holding onto you, though I try hard to loose my grip
because it hurts less letting go than knowing that you let me slip,
and even though it's hard to say just what the ending's gonna be
I must admit, it feels as if you've already let go of me.
sad how u feel like that person has given up on holding you tight like they promised they would.
{Don't let me go -- I love you,
and I'm scared to hit the ground
... but I won't blame you if you close your eyes as I come falling down...}
I LOVE how you ended your poem. it closed up really nicely. i truly say you did an amzing job here of puting your feeling and your thought here. at time it sounded like you were talking to yourself but dnt worry it made it better for me n haha i do that do. talk to myself yes indeed weird. i love it. Great job.
5/5
TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy
xXxRaulXxxFinallyxXxHappyxXx ( D )
at 2009-03-04
I Love the imagery you used throughout your poem
created a sense in which one could see the events and i like the use of similies in your poems
and the rhythm and alliteration of your poem was well thought out not your best is wat u said but damn sure sounds better than my best plz check it wanna know wat u think
"Tears of True Love" jus tell me wat u think bout it
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