No Need For A Name ( F P C D )
at 2009-04-05
The only thing I have to say is that the flow is off here and there. Other then that, perfect.
Peace and prosperity,
(RKD)
DominiqueLovesPoetry ( F C D )
at 2009-04-09
Woow..i really like the idea of the poem it's really nice..already the title of the poem is a metaphor in a way which makes it very interesting..
The flow in the poem was pretty good except of in the following stanza:
"I will swim so very far away
and force your reel unwind.
As it represents my love for you,
and lingers on my mind."
3rd line kind of stands out..don't you think?? maybe you will find something better for it..
still i must say it's a good poem!! good job!
Randy East ( F C D )
at 2009-04-09
Thank you ill work on that, maybe change it up a bit.
Michael D Nalley ( F P C D )
at 2009-04-09
Very unusual comparison but i like it
Well written poem
Mimed Lovette ( F C D )
at 2009-12-22
I love this poem of yours!
The comparison of a fisher's reel to the allure of love is exceptional. Great imagery I may say.
This stanza beckons to me the most:
But then I fight and pull away,
so sick of all your games.
Angry that your stringer's
filling up with other names.
It's amazing how these little words can bring across a bigger meaning to your readers. Good work! 5/5
KayJayxxxRTVW ( F C D )
at 2009-12-29
The rhyme is what really stood out most to me in this piece. I loved how the 2nd and 4th lines rhymed. Im trying to break out of the standard 4-Line-Stanza poems. But this was a great read.
Sometimes your gaze alone
brings me into you with ease.
Susceptible to your cunning lure.
You do so as you please.
^^my favorite stanza
Great job.
5/5 <---couldnt give you anything less for something so perfectly written
--Kay Jay
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