T e m p s ( F P C D )
at 2009-04-08
I loved your title, interesting choice of form and very well written. Syllable count.. spot on. Not much to say about this.
Good job.
5/5.
Temps
Dream Angel ( F P C D )
at 2009-04-08
You did so well, Colm:)
Glorious imperfection...these words are so spot on..indeed there is something to say for imperfection. Life is a work in progress.
It was an honor to be your inspiration;)
Hugs,
5/5 Ingrid
Sylvia ( F P C D )
at 2009-04-09
You have done very well with this form. We humans are flawed but we do hope and we are capable of love. Well done on the poem and form.
Cara ( F P C D )
at 2009-04-15
I love sedokas. They are probably my favourite short poetry form.
You said so much with so few words. If you didnt write that it was your first attempt at the form, i could never have known, it was really well done. The syllable count and all that were really great.
Really awesome work :]
5/5
Mr Darcy ( F P C D )
at 2009-04-17
You have done well with this form. Forms that require strict syallble counts are a challengs, but when written well, like this one they are so rewarding for both the reader and the writer.
We are all flawed, and it is all too easy to feel negativity about them. In this poem, you inspire the reader to embrace such differences and be proud of who they are.
Well done indeed.
Michael
Italian Stallion ( F P C D )
at 2009-04-17
Wonderful write my friend, formed poetry is often hard to write and you showed it as if you were an expert. Fantastic wording it all fell together nicely. Keep up the great work, deff. a great write for your first time.
Peace, Joe
Pieces Of Shanik ( F P C D )
at 2009-05-28
Wow for a first try you nailed it. I love how simple it was, but at the same time it was very beautiful. The words you use capture the meaning of the poem very well. I loved it. Shanik
Emotiionsz ( C )
at 2009-10-18
Nice choice on writing!
For A First NAILED on the spot!
Nice writing devices used
5/5
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