Maya ( F P C D )
at 2009-05-04
Silvia,
What a beautiful Fibonacci:)
I believe love is ageless and timeless indeed.
I believe souls meet each other each life anew and play different roles in each life. One time as mother and child, then as brother and sister..the combinations are endless and so is the possiblilty to learn from this commitment.
I also believe that some people are lovers for more than one life time..but it's really hard to know this for sure, unless one or both of the parties are clairvoyant *grins*
Excellent work:)
*hugs*
5/5 Ingrid
Cindy ( F P C D )
at 2009-05-04
Sylvia
What a beautiful poem. You did great with the form :)
((hugs))
Cindy
Anna Stephens ( F P C D )
at 2009-05-04
You did a really nice job with this form, Sylvia. It looks very complicated.
Anna
Meena Krish ( F P C D )
at 2009-05-05
Love is timeless as well as beautiful, just like
this poem. The form sounds complicated but
its written very nicely..liked the read!
Paul anand singh ( F C )
at 2009-05-06
Every aspect of love is wrapped up beautifully in this superbly pennd piece.
You have given the readers something to think about which not many i'm sure thought of frequently.
You also make this form of writing seem so easy, but thgen again, the tallent you portray as a poetess is beyond excellence.
Great job my friend.An enjoyable read.
Paul...
shobhana kumar ( F P C D )
at 2009-05-07
Dear Sylvia
this is such a warm and love filled verse that reads so unrestrained within the conformance.
it's easy to see from a verse like this, the warm heart that makes it write so.
good luck and hope
shobhana
Mr Darcy ( F P C D )
at 2009-05-07
Sylvia,
another style that you have made look so easy. :)
Is
love
timeless?
^
A great question, an opening pause for thought. Questions work so well with this strict syllable structured poems.
Does it span
passing of decades?
^
I think the flow is a bit shaky here? Maybe use: Does it span the passing decades?
Is it unaffected by space?
^
You really have given the reader much to think about.
Everlasting, eternal, ageless, older than time.
True love surpassed the ages, more certain than death itself, souls drawn closer with each rebirth.
^
..and here, it is like you have given your thoughts on the above questions. I like this explanation of love. It really reminds the reader just how 'timeless' love is. I love the 'more certain than death' part, this really hits the message home.
Through the centuries our spirits met, we shared pleasures beyond earthly recognition.
^
Here we see a personal experience. A true love experience and so a true knowledge of its impact.
Awareness encompassed hearts that knew the joy of loving
in each life, never forgetting.
Reliving moments,
ecstasy
of love
we
found.
^
Only by experiencing an emotion in its fullest state can we really appreciate the true power of love and its eternal force shaping and filling the universe that we live.
Well done Sylvia on a wonderfully, thought provoking piece.
Michael
[ Praised by : Sylvia ]
soso ( F C D )
at 2009-05-07
I like this form very much Sylvia, it's very soft and elegant but somehow the distribution of the syllable count is little confusing, at least for me.
You did fantastic job with it, picked very nice subject... And yes, in my own opinion love is timeless, and hopefully boundless.
Dixiedaisy ( F P C D )
at 2009-05-08
Sylvia you have done this with much grace and elegance. Great Job my dear. I enjoyed it.
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