Comments - Here Stands the Glass

End Of Eternity ( F P C D ) at 2009-07-22

Simply Awesome,

So many things may come to pass
Stay true inside the grief

Upon the shards of glass are tears
That time may try to heal
Inside the mind are wasted years
The soul tries hard to feel

Such beautiful lines, very powerful, loved it

all the best and take care

dreamofolwin ( F P C D ) at 2009-07-22

An amazing write... aww I just loved it. Very powerful, yet delicate writing that so touched my heart. Your a wonderful writer... who can truely express on paper the pains and turmoils of the heart... LOL
An exquisite piece of writing in my books!

Sylvia ( F P C D ) at 2009-07-22

Well done. Not only a love poem but sad as well. The pain and sadness can be felt very strongly.

Dixiedaisy ( F P C D ) at 2009-07-22

Jeannie,
I have always been so intrigued by the way you tend to weave your words and the flow always seems so effortless. You have reached that plateau on this level again. Beautiful write. A love poem yet with a touch of bitterness to the past.
Wonderful write as always.
Take Care,
Kay

mzlovehate at 2009-07-24

A bit sad but I loved it.

Ray Smallshaw ( F P C D ) at 2009-07-24

Yet again I am baffled that up to today there has been 1236 visits to your poem and only 5 have bothered to comment and score this absolutely wonderful poem that has all that is good in any poem. It is beautifully metered, it flows with no hiccups and it actually makes sense. I have been there and know how fragile even in the strongest heart can be.
Love the incisiveness insight of this part of the poem in the second stanza:-

A heart's caught unaware
Deep in the mind a turmoil comes
To shatter life it seems
Leaves the wounded heart unstrung
Among the broken dreams

You have caught the feeling of total hopelessness and then in the last stanza point out time may be the only answer to the shatter heart. Absolutely wonderful I choked up reading it. 5/5 for its excellence and I voted it for the competition Ray S

Directly Implied ( F P C D ) at 2009-07-27

There is nothing to add that hasn't been said. A great poem
A sad yet beautiful write. This was winner material
Impressive/

emma at 2009-07-27

This is an amazing poem.

Prolife And Proud ( F P C D ) at 2009-07-27

"When pain has tipped the heart of glass
And time finds no relief
So many things may come to pass
Stay true inside the grief"

A excellent opening, I like how you just are positive and give off a sense of hope here. I found this whole concept brilliant and well-penned.


"Where turns the clock that spins the soul"

The wording here is fantastic and simply pulls the reader more in to your words.


"If trouble comes along
To chill the hurt and find the hole
Inside the heart done wrong"

Great work so far, this is just stunning!


"Somewhere beneath the moonlit glow
A burden's left to bear
Against the winds of winter's snow
A heart's caught unaware"

Your descriptions hold my attention and you express all the pain and emotion so well.


"Deep in the mind a turmoil comes
To shatter life it seems
Leaves the wounded heart unstrung
Among the broken dreams"

Wonderful word usage like "unstrung" was very unique and fit well, and so did "turmoil".
This is a powerful write, keep it up!


"Upon the shards of glass are tears
That time may try to heal
Inside the mind are wasted years
The soul tries hard to feel
But come the day that pain is eased
With hope the heart is caste
No strings to twine the pain apeased
'Til then...
Here stands the glass"

Wow, what a striking ending, just simply beautiful. Such much meaning you portrayed in yoru words, and you words were felt by the reader. Congrats on the win, you really deserved this! You have much talent and it shined through on this poem.

A very impressive poem, keep it up!

~MaryAnne

Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2009-07-28

Congrats Jeannie :)
Love Cindy

Attila Nyitrai at 2009-07-31

Good job! i like this poem! 5p

Leona at 2009-08-01

A beautiful and very well-written poem. Good job.

Khrista Brewster at 2009-08-02

Wow, i love this one. some people don't know how exactly to write poetry. but i gotta say, you do :) keep it up..

waiting for the unknown ( P ) at 2009-08-02

Bloody brilliant. The flow was beautiful and it had a terrific timeless class to it. five out of five stars!