dollwithafrown ( F P C D )
I enjoyed this poem mostly because it's so easy to relate to. I know for sure that at night when I'm trying to sleep, is the time I also spend doing most of my thinking. I think it's because we have no distractions, nothing to hide the thoughts or the aches, nothing to make us forget.
"I toss and turn for hours, just hoping for a break
for sleep to overpower me and numb me from this ache.
But hours pass, I'm wide awake.. and you're still on my mind
just waiting for another chance, a sign of any kind."
^^ I liked this stanza. I also find sleep to be one of the greatest escapes. Not only is it filled with dreams that you can call your own, but it is like another world, where we can pretend it's like our own... without all the messy stuff. It really is a great tool for numbing.
An enjoyable piece. :)
Matt ( F )
Completely agree with the above, when trying to sleep is when we are at our most vulnerable to our thoughts when we've lost someone we love. Going through the exact same thing now, and i still wake at the time she used to get up every morning, breaks me every day..
Great work though
divine divinity ( F C D )
Beautiful poem. Such heart ache and love in every well written line. Loved it. Thought the flow was flawless. Excellent poem.
Hollow Emotion ( F P C D )
Very well written. The flow was awesome and the stanzas were amazing. Well done!!
suicidalkansas ( F P C D )
Wow, it was amazing!!!! wonderful job.. I can personally relate to in and that just made it even better to me...Everything just flowed so smoothly and was pieced together so great! The title did give it away a little but for how great the poem was it just completly surpassed that. Great great job 5/5
MERCY is never shown ( F P C D )
Ok i think everyone can relate to this because everyone has been or will be broken like that and the vulnerability you show well you seem to capture but a minute in time the moment each nighth when you think how they really are the most beautiful scene when someone is broken and you captured it amazingly
Ray Smallshaw ( F P C D )
I hate that people put i instead of I you have once and the poem is excellent and I have voted so 5/5 but the last line for me need a bit of attention (for the strength ) perhaps? Ray S
Wow i really liked it. Its amazing! Great flow to it and emotion. Beautiful poem.