Willow ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-19
Melissa, I find this piece to be just precious... I just adore how you have worded this piece. It paints such a wondrous picture in my mind. Beautifully done.
OHgreenman ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-21
Melissa,
Again, you have created a breathtaking piece filled with imagery.
I noticed one small thing in your first stanza:
how they attach themselves, like dewdrops
to each stand
in a rash attempt to grow a notion
from mere breath and spittle
Just one small mispelling...should read:
how they attach themselves, like dewdrops
to each STRAND
in a rash attempt....
Other than that, it's perfect!!
Beautiful Chaos ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-21
The title made me curious so I am glad that I stopped to read it. this was absolutely wonderful, I don't think I can offer any beneficial critique because I found nothing wrong with it. Your word choice was spot on and I love the way the title actually fits into the whole piece. An excellent job, indeed worthy of nomination, good luck.
Rachel RTVW ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-24
Good play on words. Excellent imagery. This piece is clever and unique. Great job!
bhaskaryya ( C )
at 2009-10-26
One of the best I have read on this site.... Good work!
Luna Blue ( F C D )
at 2009-10-26
This was a beautiful poem. The kind of love poem that doesn't annoy or bore me. Congrats on winning, it's surely worth it.
Courageous Dreamer ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-26
Congrats on the win.. very well deserved. Great imagery that drew the reader in and didnt let them stop reading. Interesting and unique write from you, well done. :]
Willow ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-27
Congrats on the WIN Melissa!! This write so deserves it and so do you, way to go!!
Kiko ( F C )
at 2009-10-27
Although I feel this poem is very well written, I'm not sure I agree with its underlying message - that a woman should give up her own dreams and identity to make her man happy. But perhaps I'm reading more into this than is necessary.
A most enjoyable read and a well-deserved win.
william mae ( F P C )
at 2009-11-19
Your love poetry is wonderful to read, chasing love, good writing.
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