Comments

Kurt ( F P C D ) at 2009-10-30

Honest, raw emotion. I can't take anything away from a write inspired by passion. Expressing love and emotions through a poem takes courage and should be greeted with joy and compliments. I applaud your efforts and greatly enjoyed reading this. Well done.

Few Typos: Feet (instead feat) and separate (instead of seperate)

Falling Star ( F C D ) at 2010-01-01

Wow this makes my poems look rubbish :O haha very nicely written poem, quite some length too. Format and flow was flawless. Keep up the good work =)

Shaun

Mimed Lovette ( F C D ) at 2010-01-03

Boy you sure do have the spirit to write long poems lol. And I thought it was quite a pleasant read, just a few spelling mistakes to correct and you're ready to go!

My heart starts to seperete.
^ seperate.

There are so many girls that you can lift off there feet.
^ their feet

Damnit I miss you when your ten feat away!
^ feet

YOUR MY WHOLE HEART, I have no dought in a second.
^ doubt

Usually I dont fall so hard, so im confusded and it shows.
^ confused

But those words could not describe those fealings for real.
^ feelings

Jes ( D ) at 2010-01-03

Aw I liked the emotion you put in this. I think you have real talent. Good Work!

Mary ( F C ) at 2010-01-06

Hey hun
Thanks so much for your comment on my poem....


This poem was really great...
It was long but suprisingly it never dragged on...
I liked it a lot because i could relate to it and it was so unique and greatly written...
Keep up the good work <3

xAllYSAURx at 2010-01-10

Very Good Poem, I enjoyed reading it,(:
Nice Flow, :D

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