Kiko ( F C )
at 2009-10-31
This is a very beautiful poem, with a certain elegance and sophistication to it. My only suggestion is to have the last line rhyme, since it is a rhyming poem:
So rugged art thou, love of mine,
But tender is thine hand,
That fits into my velvet glove
To make a pair, so grand.
Mouris ( F C D )
at 2009-11-01
Your return from the mild writing block has been brilliant. Simple but lovely. These are the kind of poems that you want to read aloud or hear on a fine spring morning. Brings smile to your face. Very nice write
Em ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-01
This is exceptionally wonderful. I enjoyed reading it from the start. I love the usage of your words, very inspiring. Well written, 5/5. Em
Fran ( C )
at 2009-11-01
The inspiration would be Robert Burns?
Very well written, thoughtful and intelligent.
Robert Gardiner ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-01
Wonderful!!!
Corinne ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-03
Ingrid, this is beautiful. You have used the terms "thine" and "thee" perfectly, without sounding trite or forced. A wonderful love poem. - And thank you for your words regarding my mother. I appreciate them very much.
Meena Krish ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-03
A mediveal love poem..short, smooth and
sweet..liked the read!
Faithless ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-03
Indeed, it is a lovely poem. I like the idea of you using old English for piece. It work for me. Your poems never seems to disappoint me and there is always something new from your poems;)
mandy ( F P C )
at 2009-11-03
Oh. My. Gosh...
This is absolutly amazing. I'm stunned!
This is the best poem I've ever read, no lie! The imagery! The flow! I don't know what else to say...
5/5! bravo!!!
mandy :)
Dixiedaisy ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-04
Ingrid,
What a beautiful poem. It is short but has everything that is needed to get the point across. A very lovely write.
Musicality ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-04
Beautiful, short, sweet, simplistic and refined. Ingrid you never cease to amaze.
If I were to make any critique of this poem I'd say I'd replace the And (maybe with while?)as well as the last so(quite grand perhaps) to add a more pleasant sound, and to alternate word usage. Though I'm not sure if it would make much of a difference to this piece.
Best to you,
Music
The Poetic Child ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-05
Short but yet so Meaningful...
amazing!
Quiet Insanity ( F C D )
at 2009-11-06
This is just a short wonderful poem. Loved the wording , the feeling of it. You have done a great job Ingrid, glad you are posting again.
Chelsey ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-06
Oh my goodness I wish I could write this way! Using thine, and thee, and thou is really hard for me. Its an older way of speaking, but i absolutely love reading it! At least one of us can make some great poetry out of it :)
beautifully written, Loved the title! It really drew me in!
Nice work!
Chelsey
Mysterious Charmer ( F C )
at 2009-11-06
Simple worded love poems tend to be my favorite, for they hold such a deep meaning and feeling. Your poem is just that! This write is a beauty of a piece dear lady. And no doubt an enjoyable read.
Take care,
Mysterious Charmer
Genuine Lavender ( F C D )
at 2009-11-08
Ingrid,
You did a very very soft artistic job here, the old english is so elegant and you really added your own passionate touch to this unique idea and made it more elegant in few lines.
Very well done.
Best wishes, always.
Paul anand singh ( F C )
at 2009-11-09
Very heartfelt and beautifully penned.
An enjoyable read.
Paul...
The Bird and the Worm ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-15
The beat and flow in this was so prominent, although it was simply worded, it penned such beauty. A lovely write, especially since using Old English. Keep up the magnificent work my friend!
~MaryAnne
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