Karl Wild ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-31
This is a very touching piece and I enjoyed it very much. When you love somebody more than anything in the world it doesn't matter what you do with them as long as you're with them. The ending was very well done and made the poem even stronger. Great job on this 5/5 GG23
Konstantin
at 2009-11-01
Well... I can't call it 'love poem', it's rather 'nature'. But it's NICE. Konstantin.
Kristina ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-02
This poem was very well written and it flowed really nicely, too. I think you did a really great job on writing it. You expressed yourself very well. 5/5
~Kristina
Cindy ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-05
What a emotion filled poem.
Now I'm here, kneeling on the wet grass,
and my clothing is soaked by the rain.
I don't feel the cold air on my face,
or hear the rain, falling, all around me,
or feel the wind on my back.
When we lose the one we love it is hard to feel again. Pain consumes your heart and soul. With only memories for company. Nice stanza.
I promise I'll come lay with you someday,
and we'll watch the rain wash the world clean.
It will make everything new again,
and the wind will be wet against our faces,
and it will all be so...wonderful.
The promise of spending eternity together keeps us going. The wait sometimes seems to long. Great ending.
Excellent job!
Take Care
Cindy
lostlove1 ( F C D )
at 2009-11-06
Sir,
Its like you were there watching me..although I did not see you.. I wonder how you saw into my heart,mind,soul and heart. My words could never relay to you what your words did to me as I read..My soul is still realling..sobbing..and smiling. Thank You...~Lostlove!~
Sumit Ojha ( F C D )
at 2009-11-12
Little long but excellent poem. (5/5)
Stephanie Naylor ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-26
This just about reduced me to tears. It was very captivating. I kept wondering how exactly it would end. And it ended very amazingly. Though you used the word "peace" twice in like 2 or 3 stanzas and for some reason it sounded odd to me. I loved the idea of everything being washed anew. Very great. Once again a great peice of work. 5/5
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