Nobodys Hero ( F C D )
at 2009-11-01
A very sad poem =[
Again your rhyimg was carried really well throughout each stanza and the flow worked nicely! You also displayed your emotion in a very well written mannor, great poem =]
Ray Smallshaw ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-11
This actually runs well as its meter is easy to follow and so its flow is excellent, A lot of care has gone into this poem as it makes sense so you must have actually felt what you wrote as in the few poems I had read prior to this the lines just don't seem to run true. You are young and with experience you will find that what you write must make sense as all good love or sad poetry does. Well done time is a great healer hope it does you. Ray S 5/5
No Need For A Name ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-22
I must be honest, I wasn't impressed. Your similes and metaphors are simple and silly. You use very little imagination in your words, with really nothing creative to say. Your flow is off in many places, and poing from four stanzas to five for the last just was confusing. Next time, sit down, focus, take your time, and write something that can express yourself and be entertaining. Sorry.
Peace and prosperity,
(RKD)
Michael D Nalley ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-24
This poem is what I call spilling your guts. Another poet might see it as puting your blood on paper at any rate I felt the emotion as you beared your soul eloquently
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