Courageous Dreamer ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-12
I know the feeling all too well--that one person lingering and just doesn't go away. The hurt that goes along with it is overwhelming-loved your way of describing that, giving the arousing aroma personification by saying it had devilish hooks. Well done Bliss.
Genuine Lavender ( F C D )
at 2009-11-12
That was extremely innovative job from you Bliss, all I hope it finds the right appreciation.
EvanescentMoon ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-13
This was delicately worded and measured..And i could feel the lingering pain althroughout the poem..Well done...
Kurt ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-13
This poem looks like it took an excruciating amount of time to finish. The way it is put together really aids the reader in feeling the lingering pain.
"Perhaps your presence
shadows my every move
for I wish to cling to faith
a moment longer, in hopes
it does not betray my trust."
This stanza blew my mind. The imagery created by the first two lines followed up with the impact and power of the third line almost left me breathless. Truly splendid work. 5/5.
Nema ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-14
AMAZING!
I absolutely love is Bliss! (: especially your ending, it's always amazing to end the poem beautifully, strengthens it more and more.
"Perhaps your presence
shadows my every move
for I wish to cling to faith
a moment longer, in hopes
it does not betray my trust."
^
I loved this stanza :) great imagery!
I really liked your almost-repetitive lines, with the word linger, totally descriptive!
Very well done sweetie. I really really missed your poems, I'm so glad you're back on the lane.
Write on~
Ingrid de K ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-16
Well deserving of a win Bliss, congrats!
I did not get a chance to read this piece until now, but I am glad I did.
And your haunting scent
invades my essence
for I am not ready,
to release
Linger...
and we'll intertwine
in my dreams.
^^
Letting go can indeed be very hard, you captured this sentiment very well within this verse.
God bless,
5/5 Ingrid
Luna Blue ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-16
Interesting poem this was, not the average love poem at all. Amazing how you captured my attention with every line... This was beautiful, a well deserved win.
Courageous Dreamer ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-16
YAAAY! congrats Bliss :] well deserved, keep writing :]
Nema ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-17
Congraaatss sweetie!! yaaay I'm soo happy for you! :)
This is a beautiful well-deserving poem.
Mr Rhee ( F P C )
at 2009-11-18
Very fine wording. I loved this poem. It was so strong in feeling and memories. Well done.
RavynsRemorse ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-19
Lovely
~R
Genuine Lavender ( F C D )
at 2009-11-20
Congratulations.
I thought I already said it.
So happy with the results, you do deserve it.
PinkyPrincess ( F C )
at 2009-11-20
Wow.... This poems is beautiful and you realllly deserve the win! Congratulations!! I loooove ittt... you've expressed really deep emotions... I love the repetition of "...you linger" .. It makes it more emotional and powerful. Wonderful job dear!
PinkyPrincess ( F C )
at 2009-11-20
Wow.... This poems is beautiful and you realllly deserve the win! Congratulations!! I loooove ittt... you've expressed really deep emotions... I love the repetition of "...you linger" .. It makes it more emotional and powerful. Wonderful job dear!
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