Luna Blue ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-29
I loved the images you've created here for your beloved one. But the very first line really confused me:
"Madness is making me mad madness and my melody may be get in my blood with a blade"
^I think it's quite obvious that "madness is making you mad". And I think there needs to be a comma after the word "mad".
Also, there only needs to be a space after a comma, not in fron of it it as well.
But aside from the things I've mentioned, it is still a nice piece.
Keep writing,
Luna
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