Mr Rhee ( F P C )
at 2009-11-26
Oh, my. What wonderful words of a wonderful relationship. A whole life together in one poem. A wonderful piece.
MERCY is never shown ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-27
Aw. . .it's so sweet i've always been a person to fall for the little things so much more them when people try to impress me and your poem was so sweet but i didn't expect it to end that way it made me sad but it was a great write
Michael D Nalley ( F P C D )
at 2009-11-28
This poem is in perfect form and powerfully romantic
Hollymariee ( F C D )
at 2009-11-28
The flow is a little off , but that could be fixed by doing a syllable count and making a few lines longer. I really like how you seperated your ideas in the two line stanzas, it's effective on the way I read it .. And your rhymes are really good for the most part . This is a really cute poem , 5/5 .
kate ( C D )
at 2009-12-01
This was a really cute poem. at the end of the poem im not really sure if it was a brakeup or a dying love kinda thing going on (: but either way this was beautiful and i really enjoyed it.
keep it up.
keep on writing.
love forever and always
Katlynn Marie Plumadore
KayJayxxxRTVW ( F C D )
at 2009-12-28
Great poem. nice flow and rhyme scheme was on point.
i gave it a 5/5
--kay jay
p.s. thanks for the rude comment. it was greatly appreciated.
ilikepurple222 ( F P C D )
at 2009-12-28
This was beautiful!!! i really loved this! honestly! i want to live with this feeling even when i grow older!
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