Lady Nik ( F P C D )
at 2010-01-13
But your twisted love closed all the doors
*I'd use another word here since you said "twisted" in the first stanza. Maybe "sick" or "warped" something like that. Other than that I realy enjoyed this piece. It was sad but your words were beautiful. Maybe it was just me but I also got a dark feeling from this. I would have liked for there to be more. It felt kind of rushed and cut off. But a great sad love story that I'm sure a lot of people can relate to. Nice job hun :) Nik*
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