Broken Masquerade ( F C D )
at 2009-12-14
This is so amazing, so powerful. It flowed really well and the simple rhyming scheme worked very well. I love how you connected the beginning of the poem to the ending with the whole hands thing. and the last line of "cause we were the special two" finished it of perfectly. this is great, loved it! well done :)
5/5 for sure :)
Freedom ( F C D )
at 2009-12-16
Its amazing.you are talented :) i liked how you explained the feelings,sadly i feel nearly the same now,and everyone tells me i will forget him but i found it is so hard to do...and your poem in a perfect way tells about it..my favorite stanza was
They said you were a "faggot";
Said you shouldn't be allowed to live.
I'm trying to understand, but all I see
Is the kind of love they could never give.
And also I know the feeling when you think that you will never find anyone to love more than him..
anyway be strong :) if you are writing from your experience :)
5/5
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