Mera Luna ( F P C D )
at 2010-01-26
This was a beautiful poem. All of the club members had done a great job writing a poem based on their quotes, and so did you. Your words were able to touch my heart, and that while it used to be emotionless towards love. =p
"To breathe ..
the breath of your breath.
To cry ...
the tears of your tears."
^ This caught my eye when I firstly read it. The words were so simple but created a big impact.
Courageous Dreamer ( F P C D )
at 2010-01-26
Ohh wow Luanne, one of the most beautiful pieces I have read in quite some time. This was truly impressive . I loved the vocabulary for one. Secondly a wonderful quote to base a poem off of , and definatly the truth. We can give love but should also be accepting of it as well, if we dont let love in we could be msising out on so much . Theres no words to describe this powerful, beautiful write that you have penned for us. LOVE LOVE LOVE IT!
Cindy ( F P C D )
at 2010-01-27
Luanne
Again you have penned a gem. This is breathtaking.
Lastly Dearest !
To love - hand in hand
beneath a blanket of cloudy skies
and a half - filled cup of sunshine.
And - together- unfold
the beauty ...
of the rainbow.
The ending is so beautiful. Your words just capture the heart of the reader.
Excellent!
*hugs
Cindy
Rachel RTVW ( F P C D )
at 2010-01-27
Baeutifully penned.Good word choice.
I especially loved the ending:
^Lastly Dearest !
To love - hand in hand
beneath a blanket of cloudy skies
and a half - filled cup of sunshine.
And - together- unfold
the beauty ...
of the rainbow.^
I love the half filled cup of sunshine. Seems hopeful insted of looking at it half empty. Great job LU!
sarah
at 2010-01-27
This was the first poem I read today, and honestly I feel fulfilled! This was the absolute greatest poem I have ever read!
Mimed Lovette ( F P C D )
at 2010-01-31
Lu, this is such an A-M-A-Z-I-N-G write!!!
The first stanza was enough to catch all of my attention already!
Dearest, how I yearn
to exist within the unwrapped
folds of your heart.
Explore every crevice and feel -
every fragile thought that bleeds.
^ ^ ^
I loved loved LOVED the way you wrote this first bit, and what followed after sure was not even an inch disappointing! The flow was smooth and I loved the outbursts of emotions every now and then :D
love love, Landy.
Sammy
at 2010-02-10
Thats really beautiful
PinkyPrincess ( F C )
at 2010-02-10
Aww... beautiful!! And congratulations on the win! You deserve it... I love the link between love and rainbows.. I've written a few poems comparing a beautiful rainbow to a beautiful ending.. I loved the poem.. Well done!
PinkyPrincess ( F C )
at 2010-02-10
Aww... beautiful!! And congratulations on the win! You deserve it... I love the link between love and rainbows.. I've written a few poems comparing a beautiful rainbow to a beautiful ending.. I loved the poem.. Well done!
Even a Rose Grows From the Pavem ( F P C D )
at 2010-02-14
Simply beautiful. From the imagery to emotion. The poem has great structure. Wonderful job!
Even a Rose Grows From the Pavem ( F P C D )
at 2010-02-14
Simply beautiful. From the imagery to emotion. The poem has great structure. Wonderful job!
Even a Rose Grows From the Pavem ( F P C D )
at 2010-02-14
Simply beautiful. From the imagery to emotion. The poem has great structure. Wonderful job!
AJ xXx RTVW xXx ( F P C D )
at 2010-08-04
Lu, if this were any good it would have a 5/5 and a front page win.. wait.. this must be pretty good then XD
I loved it, very good transitions and pauses.. it flows so well, like a rainbow. I don't know how I missed this contest, looks like it was fun...
"Double rainbow all the way across the sky.." - If you don't know what that is then google it, it will make your day.. but make sure you get the original video, not the song haha
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