Britt ( F C D )
at 2012-05-21
Beautiful metaphors, Jane. This is heartbreakingly beautiful.
gIrL aka Meme ( F P C D )
at 2012-05-25
Awwwwwwww,
this is so beautiful and heartfelt. Love poems are packed with feelings, and yours was just perfect on delievering those feelings to the reader. People can relate to such pieces in one way or another.
Way to go on this one.
-Meme
Maple Tree ( F P C D )
at 2012-05-27
I truly admire and adore this elegantly written poem... It's creative and just lovely!
Tara Kay ( F P C D )
at 2012-05-27
Jane, I loved this piece, it was superbly written with the metaphors that were beautiful and I can feel the emotion in me, the way you captured it was outstanding
Lovely
xxx
Yakevi ( F P C D )
at 2012-05-28
YANE BE POPPING WINS LIKE CHILDREN MENSE!!
xOXO
Naughtymouse ( F C D )
at 2012-08-29
One day....i will comment on this, but right now i am unable to ......OMG this is AMAZING! i feel like im in shock and awe.....Sigh!
x
Maple Tree ( F P C D )
at 2012-09-03
The elegant nature tones of this heart breaking love poem just really captivated me-
This is a wonderful poem. Beautiful inside and out with clear detailed imagery, with tender wording throughout-
The title relates to the poem well and such a beautiful setting with this metaphoric delight.
The poem is spoken in truth from a poet who pours her heart out with such elegance and detailed beauty.
I really adore the way you compare the currents to two hearts becoming one-
Its relatable to life love and pain...
This is a fantastic poem and one of my favorites from this author-
Well done Silvershoes
Britt ( F C D )
at 2012-09-03
Comment from judging:
A play by play of a beautiful relationship gone violent (in the metaphorical, ocean sense).. this is a heartbreaking poem with beautiful images and another poem so many can relate to. I love the title and how perfectly it fits, and was quite fond of the structure, with really long lines, some much shorter. It didn't feel rushed and the pace was perfect. What a piece
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