Comments - Forbidden Fantasy

Dagmar Wilson ( F P C D ) at 2012-06-09

Reminds me of a forbidden fruit
feeling rather ashamed and somewhat guilty
I do love this poem, quite remarkable
excellent penned Hannah

Thomas ( F P C D ) at 2012-06-09

Nicely written piece.

You depict very well the struggle people feel when they desire someone but can't be with.
There is always the question if the person feels the same as well.

Everlasting ( F P C D ) at 2012-06-09

All of the poems had something that made me love them.

I love the questions that you asked within this piece, I found each of them provoking.

"Do small things trigger a thought of me? Does the taste of succulent strawberries remind you of my lips?"

^ this questions, so simple yet so provoking.

You invaded my heart,
Questions start bombing my thoughts,
I wonder if you are in this war, too?

---Then the last question, I wonder if you are in this war, too?
I love that you are wondering if he is also wondering about you.

I found the tone of the poem, dreamy but also calm. and that's what I love about it.

Though this made me laugh a bit.
"and even the slight stubble on my unshaven legs reminds
me of your five o'clock shadow."

---I was not expecting to read unshaven legs or shave legs in a poem. lol

Overall, I enjoyed the read, thank you for participating and sharing your thoughts. too.

Infinite Catastrophe aka Alisha ( F P C D ) at 2012-06-12

The imagery was just perfect.
Fantastic use of words and nice arrangement too.

This is a absolutely stunning piece.

Steven Beesley ( F P C D ) at 2012-06-13

So much deep longing written into this write.
It is nicely entwined with such lovely images of the past with your lover and questions whether
they still have the same memories and thoughts.

Excellent Hannah!

The Poet Behind The Poems ( F P C D ) at 2012-06-15

Straight into my favs ... That was a truly remarkable write gave me goose bumps ... your word choice was perfect could not fault it flawless

beautiful write