Comments - Hope (Essence)

Ben Pickard ( F C D ) at 2016-04-11

Hello Samia

How on earth you have made a poem out of two lines and twelve syllables is anyone's guess but you have - this is lovely and a form that I hadn't heard of.

Take care and well done on this write,
Ben

*Edit On second read - does the first line have 7 syllables here?
Hope = 1
approaches =3
from = 1
above= 2

what about something like "hope travels from above"

Up to you, either way this is still great

[ Praised by GB | Approved by Britt ]

GB ( F P C D ) at 2016-04-11

Hi Ben,

Thank you for bringing this to my attention, the word "approach is just fundamental for the meaning, so I will just make slight changes, thank you once more, greatly appreciate it :)

Ben Pickard ( F C D ) at 2016-04-12

Brilliant Samia - sneaky and very cleverly done!

Em ( F P C D ) at 2016-04-16

As Ben says how you have written a piece from 12 syllables and 2 lines is my guess but you have and you have done it beautifully. Great form.

Em