Comments - Sugar Lava

Sir Lancelot ( F P C D ) at 2016-08-07

What a wonderful and descriptive piece of poetry. I found it to be almost surreal as I read it through, like sifting through a colourful haze of words, if that makes any sense at all.

sunder each and every
starry eyed parasite
preying on reverie.

^^

I love this, particularly 'preying on reverie'

Great write,

SL

DirgeVenustas ( F P C D ) at 2016-08-07

Great imagery, great use of words and rhymes but there were two stanzas that didn't work out too well. Either way this was by far one of the most unique as interesting poems I've read in a long time.

The Monster you Trust ( F P C D ) at 2016-08-07

Any advice? I knew as I wrote this that things didn't quite fit together