Comments - When My Grip Fails For Just A Moment.

Maple Tree ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-01

Damn......just beautiful

Mr Darcy ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-01

Your heart feels like a surgeon slicing through nerves with a rusty scalpel.

Ben, (got it!!) Your word choice is superb, describing how desperately your heart yearns.

Your methods maybe unorthodox, but self-flaggelation is to my mind under rated.

Well done.

Michael

P.s. if you want to borrow my cat o' nine tails, just ask!!

Em ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-01

What a gem!! When reading something so beautiful it gives you goose bumps like when hearing a beautiful song, just wow.

Em

Everlasting ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-01

No offense intended, but I was expecting to read something gore and that made me cringe? ( i don;t know which word to use) plus something that made me scream.

P.s. XD I read Mr. Darcy's comment first... and it lured me to the poem, hence, my mind was too bias as to what to expect. ( Guilty, I enjoy reading his comments when he comments XD)

As far as the poem goes, it's a beauty.

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-02

Boom! This so beautiful. ..

this stanza such a tastefully sweet choice of words. ..
*****
I see myself in you and you in I,
cut from the same star, on the same path,
hand in hand through galaxies of memories
and more to be born.......


I will wait for more of your piece.
have a great time.

Gel

Sir Lancelot ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-02

And I will love you just as the sun loves the sea at sunset

^^

You come up with lines like this effortlessly, old chap. It really is rather annoying, lol

Wonderful write, Ben and great to see new stuff from you.

SL