Comments - Between I Love You And Goodbye

Ezeani Sunday at 2016-09-17

Good read!!! I love every bit of the poem but I am so much intrigued by the Stanza four.

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-17

Hi,

thank you for reading.I wrote this piece Year 2005 and never move on that time.We already part ways years ago (1999) .. Then I found my true love 2006 and finally moved on .. I just want to post it here because of one good reason -> Just sharing, just in case someone might relate to this piece.

thanks again.

Gel

Ben Pickard ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-18

Hello Gel,

It's so difficult when we realise that someone doesn't feel the same way about us as we do about them. And if we discover that there is someone else, well, that just damns the situation further, doesn't it?

Great write,

Ben

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-18

Yes,it is Ben. I'm glad I already found my true love in the persona of my husband and I will never feel the way I felt before.

thanks for the time reading this Ben

Gel

Autumn Breeze ( C D ) at 2016-09-18

Hi,

You have written this love topic in a very lovely way. I like the theme and your imaginary mind.

But I would like to correct you some points:

Here, in the second line -
You want to escape someone who hurt herself for you every day

I think the word, "from" is missing here between escape and someone. Sans that word the true meaning of that line is not coming forth.

It should be -
You want to escape from someone who hurt herself for you every day

Fifth line - A comma is missing after greatest love.

So, you have pained this good write in a very blissful way with lots of loving emotions. Hope your love will come back.

All the best. 5/5

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-18

Hi A.B.,

thanks for the correction.
I will take it bro