Comments - Magic

Autumn Breeze ( C D ) at 2016-10-01

Hi Gel.

Another good love poem. But I have some suggestions. It's just a suggestion.

I don't think touch is necessary in the first line.

You can make this a bit more romantic -

Can you hold me and kiss my lips

2nd line -

I long for that coz you never did it.

You can use -

I'm like a dry land because you never did it.

3rd line - You can use this

I am so eager to mingle with your arms.

For the rest of the below lines; still I think you could've made it even more magical, connecting some more enthralling romance.

But very well done for this too.

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-01

Thanks Augustus :)

Ben Pickard ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-01

Ahh, lovely, Gel. When we find that special someone, they really can consume our every waking hour, can't they? It seems like you have...

Take care and stay well,

Ben

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-01

Thank you Sir Ben. :)

KEN ( F P C ) at 2016-10-01

Nice Gel, emotions propel the words, I like how you bring in Nature also.

Ken

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-02

Hi Ken,

thank you :)

Em ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-02

Such a sweet little piece about that special someone.

Loved the middle stanza, so cute.

Em

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-02

Hi Em,

Lol so cute like you. ...Thank you Em