Comments - And It's You All along (Senryu)

Em ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-12

Gel. I like this and its got a powerful message behind it. I think if we ll loved the universe, earth etc then we wouldn't go far wrong.

Em

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-12

Thanks Em. He's the universe lol...

ether ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-12

This is so sweet, and a perfectly executed form.
However, I interpreted it differently to what you meant by this. So my first thought was to agree with Em's comment.

My interpretation of this piece is that you regretted throwing your love out in to the literal universe. Perhaps capitalising "Universe" or saying "my universe" rather then "the universe" would get rid of the minor confusion. Just a thought.

Regardless, this is a precious peace and well worth a 5/5!

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-12

Hi Ether,

I will take your suggestion to avoid confusion. .Thank you for this. ..

smile and hugs

Gel

Brenda ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-12

Amen to that statement! This packs a lot of power in those few words, well done-

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-12

Brenda thanks for the beautiful comment...

deeplydesturbed ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-12

Well done Gel!
Excellent work! Isn't is sad when we make someone our whole universe and they make decisions which in turn have us question ourselves!

I hope it all works out and you no longer see it as a mistake, but the greatest thing you could do..

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-13

Naomi,

And your Universe is looking for another Universe. .ouch. ..
Thanks for the comment

Milly Hayward ( F C D ) at 2016-10-13

I liked this very much and it was my understanding that To my universe meant the man who you considered your universe.

So much can be read into those three simple yet emotionally complex lines. An excellent Senryu

Milly x

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-13

Thanks Milly dear. . :)