Comments - The last message parts I , II & III

Peggy at 2005-06-04

that was freakin sad...ru gonna write a part three....probably would b kinda hard to do though....well great job...and keep writing

lisa x) ( F P C D ) at 2005-06-06

it was a sad emotional poem and i enjoyed it....
maybe put part 1 as 1 poem and part 2 as a diff poem and then revise and work on stanzas and rhyming...all in all it was a good poem... i voted 5 on this

Naima ( F C D ) at 2005-06-06

I love it! A tradgic love story! Great! I'm a writer and I right novels poems, and songs and so I can relate with what's going on. I've been known to have characters who've done things like this. It's complex like myself and you did a great job

No Motiv? ( F P C D ) at 2005-06-07

excellently portrayed. hard to criticize this piece....it flows, makes sense, and agrees with rhythm/rhyme.

Wonderful write.

Please comment on some of my work?

Greatly appreciated,
Christa//No Motiv?

jessica at 2005-06-26

i love it! i think its amazing. your a really talented writer. well, take care.

Mariah at 2005-06-26

That was a very good poem. GREAT JOB:)

blackrose1011 ( F C D ) at 2005-07-01

i would tell you i love it, but love is over used. remember suiside is a lasting solution to a temperary problem. your ryhme was placed well in the poem. however i dont think that if i was sitting on my dead boyfriends grave i would be wishing my tears were blood. i would just want to die, and lay next to him. just so you know... but it works.

~Breeze

Adam Murphy ( F P C ) at 2005-07-02

yea..but the idea is shes pregnant so she cant really just off herself..no, she could, but i would rather she didnt i guess..lol

*l0$t~n~4g0t* ( P C ) at 2005-07-06

wow that was really good

Jess ( F P C ) at 2006-01-19

WOW. This poem is powerful. it really does show how people misunderstand things. It is really good Kepp up the good work

lonely lovely emo girl ( F P C ) at 2007-05-06

I normally don't care for love poems to much because they are always about all the good and happy things of it, but this poem shows both sides, very sad yet it is amazing and magnificent, beauitful job

~Love Whitney

Wallace ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-12

Amazing poem, you truly have a talent, excellent work. Check out some of my poems when you have the time.

Best Wishes
Wallace

Tobie at 2007-06-06

It was sad amazing i loved the way every word fell in place keep it up man it was good
5/5

laura at 2007-06-22

Is there gonna b a part 3?????

Tiffany ( C ) at 2007-06-23

Amazing....I found myself crying with the girl in the poem!!! excellent job and I love your style of writing....Please tell me there will be a part 3????? =)

Brittney ( F C D ) at 2007-08-28

This is a great poem. Part one being my favorite.
'i saw you lip the word love
my heaven became home
with hell up above'
those lines are my favorite. To me they have a lot of meaning behind them.
Overall great write. Keep up the good work.
5/5
*Brittney

Amy Jo ( F P ) at 2007-09-12

That was amazing and you wrote it perfectly..nothing could be added to make it better.. don't write a part three..this was just right

jazmine ( F ) at 2007-09-16

Omg..i swear its da best poem ive read till nw..its rele touching...i hope dis story aint true..daamn great poem..keep it up 5/5

Alexis at 2007-09-17

That was so sad i think im gonna cry ill never be quick to judge without confronting again

Erin ( F C ) at 2007-09-25

DAMMMMn!! i loved it!! 5/5! your really talented. check out some of mine if you'd like


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