Comments - Love is where you are... !

Brooke ( F C D ) at 2005-07-13

Beautifully written poem! The only thing I think might help the reader is if you broke it up into stanzas. It would be a little easier to read! It just my opinion though! You did an amazing job. I look forward to reading more or your poetry! Hope you'll post more soon! Take Care! Brooke~ =)

shannon ( F C D ) at 2005-07-13

awww i really do like this poem...5/5!!! keep it up

Natalie84 ( F P C D ) at 2005-07-13

The ideas are great but I have a few suggestions:
“whenever a garden's tended” Maybe “to” should be after tended.

The commas and periods after each line aren’t really necessary either.
You should do a spell check. But more importantly you shouldn’t use shortened words like “cuz” in your poetry. That can some times give people the wrong impression of you. I don’t read poetry when people write like that and many others within this site feel the same way, so just keep that in mind.

Also to make the poem flow better and a little easier to read you could break the poem up into stanzas. That would help a lot I think.

You are the writer and I can only give suggestions. It's your call...

I really did like this piece as it offers so much love and will make the reader smile. I’d say very good start…and you’ll only get better with time. Nice write! :)

Britney ( F C D ) at 2005-07-13

Well thats a great start for your first poem on here! I truly loved your poem. Stanza's may help but your poem not having stanza's also makes it differnent from everybody elses. Stanza's would break it up more and make your point more clear... but is def. the writers choice. I think it reads fine without them. So keep up the good writing oyur off to a great start!

Natalie84 ( F P C D ) at 2005-07-13

SEE! Already better! Nicely done!

Derekcj at 2005-07-13

Aww, beautiful! Absolutely beautiful! Such an amazing poem! It's perfect! =)

Erikka ♥ ( F P C D ) at 2005-07-18

Beauitful poem. I absolutley loved it! I can really relate to this too. xX

Azreal at 2005-07-24

Hehe very cute poem I liked it a lot ... Story was great rhyme could use sum work but it did flow well and overall it was amazing :) Well done

-Azreal-

nicole ( C D ) at 2005-07-31

good poem really good 5/5 keep up the good work.

vikki ( F C D ) at 2005-08-04

your poem was really good, im glad you asked me to read it. you have a really good talent. i look forwrd to reading more of your poems, and rating them too. do the same for me ty

xxx vikki xxx

Katie ( F C D ) at 2005-08-04

good,i dont rhyme so sorry

Pat Trick at 2005-08-08

That was wonderful too. You are going on my favorites list. I just love the way you write.

Trick

Travis Smith ( F P C D ) at 2005-08-08

Very well written, I can see why its 5.0 with 17 votes, nicely done! keep that kind of work going!!

Britney ( F C D ) at 2005-08-11

Wow very nice poem. You could tell that all your emotion was in that! The ending truly was something though But this poem was awesome! 5/5!

lisa x) ( F P C D ) at 2005-08-15

Great write I really enjoyed it..I loved how you say all the things bout love it rocks!
the flow was way good and I enjoyed reading it, it put a smile on my face, Thank you :)

x)

ღl*themeuneverseen*l ღ ( F C D ) at 2005-08-21

WOW!WOW!WOW! THis is soooo beautiful. I'm speechless. No flaws. Amazing work!

Much Love
~*hAiLy*~

jodie ( F P C D ) at 2005-09-15

Fabulous poem ... i loved it

sadnessinshadows ( D ) at 2005-09-16

I liked it... when you're in love, you see everything as wonderful and full of love! and does love really change a person that much?

andrea ( F C D ) at 2005-09-16

Awww its soooo cute. i was all sad from reading the other one...now im like happy. your an awesome writer with lots of talents

~*Curious Me*~ ( F P C ) at 2005-09-18

Very cute poem.I love this one.Thanks for commentiing on my poem.5/5


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