*Chelsey-Lynn* ( F P C D )
at 2006-04-23
*dances around* I know who this is abouuuuttt!!!! aye-aye-aye LOL! ow ow that is some hot stuff woman and I can't wait till you two meet so I can hear all about it!!!! This was a beautiful poem Britt that explains and expresses your feelings to the man its to! I loved this...does he know you write poems about him? Lol
Love you girlie and loved this poem!
♥Angela♥ ( F P C D )
at 2006-04-23
Oh my!!!!!!!! If this is how you write before your bodies meet, then I don't wanna read about after your bodies meet, lol.... flow and rhyme are perfect and the words are beautiful and sensual. Wonderful write!
Simon Hayes ( F C D )
at 2006-04-24
Wonderful! So beautifully written with such elegant words and the perfect flow. Great write as always :)
Luanne ( F P C D )
at 2006-04-24
I'm lovin this one Britt , from the title to each individual stanza .
You have some really great wordings put into this poem that just make me go WOW !.!.!.
This one especially caught my eye :
Destiny screams out
your name in my ears
Wonderfully written poem Britt , everyday you amaze me more and more as your writing has expanded to near perfection.
Take care Britt , Muah !!
sarah ( F P C D )
at 2006-05-05
Fantastic poem, The wording you have used and the way it flows is perfect, def got my 5 vote keep writing and take care Sarah x.
Brehanna
at 2006-05-08
I know who this is about!
hehe.
And i really do love it.
love ya.
-bre
•°-Renee™-°• ( F P C D )
at 2006-05-11
The flow in this poem is perfect! I love it. And it describes so many people's feelings but then again, it's in only a way you could describe it. Many people need this kind of love and passion, but few people have it. You being one of the lucky few, you lucky B. :-P lol.
Take Care,
Renee
Jules ( F P C D )
at 2006-09-09
This poem was really touching...I really liked it. I thought her feelings were expressed really well and I can totally relate...great job!
~Jules
Jason ( F P C D )
at 2006-11-29
I'm not much for love poety but this ....
is simple beautyful. With sensual words like this, I think you could melt even the hardest heart.
Excellent ryme schem by the way.
Kayla ( C D )
at 2007-01-19
Wow that was such a sweet poem! the word-choice was absolutely beautiful! Although its a simple quatrain poem, there was a lot of emotion. Imagery was also good! I would like to see you rhyme words better. You're using common words to rhyme just because its easier. Use more variety! but the rest of the poem was fantastic! good work!
-kayla
[Soul to soul connection
our bodies yet to meet
fate threw the distance
our lips unable to greet]
It was such a great beginning to the poem and it kept me really kept me readin
BriBri .x. ♥ ( F P C D )
at 2007-01-25
OMGOSH! -Cries.- lol, that was sooooooooo amazingly beautiful. The wording, flow, rhyming.. omgosh. everything was just perfect. I can really really relate to this & wow.. You just honestly left me in awe. You're deffinitley going on my favs. :]
ANYWAYS! First off, loved the title.. Amazing! Very catchy, dear.
Soul to soul connection
our bodies yet to meet
fate threw the distance
our lips unable to greet
Time hasn't changed
feelings for you or me
it's only made them stronger
we're the perfect couple-to-be
^^ First two stanzas, really caught me. They dragged me in & just wanted me to keep reading more & more. I wish it was longer. lol. But i loved it. It was absolutley perfect. I have no bad critique for this.
Beautifully penned.
Bri.x
Jenni ( F C D )
at 2007-02-02
This was a good poem, but i felt like you had to force some of your lines. especially,
"it's only made them stronger
we're the perfect couple-to-be"
for some reason, this part just threw off the flow of the poem.
other than that, it was a good poem, [:
Italian Stallion ( F P C D )
at 2007-02-06
Wow I loved this. Fanastic write. I loved the way this poem flowed so gracfully, wonderful Job. I only wish it didn't end so soon, I was just begining to really get into it. Other than that wonderful write.
Peace, Joe
SXE~Skittl3z ( F P C D )
at 2007-02-08
Wow! Inspirational... Very descriptive. Caught my attention atleast. This is my favorite of them all! It is definately something I can relate to. Your vocabulary is different from mine. I have come to notice that most people have their own set of words they always use, and we have some similar poems, but we use completely different descriptive words. It is nice to see something different. lol
Its great Keep it up. And any time you want a comment just comment me and you will get one.
peace
-anti-depression- ( F P C D )
at 2007-02-15
Great poem
becca ♥ ( F P C D )
at 2007-02-17
COMMENT # 3
AWW... this is soo cute.. the word choice is WONDERFUL.. the first stanza is my favorite! the emotion is great.. 5/5!
amoxi ( F C D )
at 2007-02-20
This was a good poem it was kinda ual but it had a great feeling to it i liked it a lot 5/5
♥ SoSickOfTears&acir ( F P C D )
at 2007-02-28
AWWWWWWWWH
This was so damn prettyful!
The first stanza was perfect and it just kept getting better.
The imagery and wording were wonderfully done.
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