Comments - The Luckiest Guy

goran ( F P C D ) at 2006-07-21

Again a sad poem for all of you
take care

freshta ( C ) at 2006-07-21

Hahahahahahahahaha
cute one.
Now you know she will not listen so you started to write to the guy.hahahaha
I think it is funny and it should be in the funny poem section.
hahahahahahaha
I think she will be made if she read it,lol
but, It is a great poem

ღ s υ ρ є я g ι я ł ღ ( F P C D ) at 2006-07-21

It's a pretty sad poem really. I thought it was pretty good though. The 2nd last stanza stood out the most to me. Keep it up!

Natalie``

Nelle ( F P C D ) at 2006-07-21

Aww that is sad, but really good! you did a great job on this one 5/5

Maddy ( F P C ) at 2006-07-21

Awww s0 sad!!! i d0nt find it funny at all... ;S neway, a beautiful j0b 0nce again! 5/5
l0ve maddy x0ox

Used2BYours at 2006-07-21

You are 2 sweet. I dont know if this is true or not but if it is i think its beautiful that u really do want her 2 be happy even if ur not.

desigirl ( F C D ) at 2006-07-21

Like always a great poem again. You do speak in your words. It seem like you mean every word you write.I really like the idea, THE LUCKY GUY, but trust me whoever is he, he is not lucky because his girl can not see true love. I really feel bad for him and for this girl.
The best job again and keep the great work like always.


courtney ( P C ) at 2006-07-21

Thats really sweet yet really sad but a great poem 5/5
~courtney~

shela ( F C ) at 2006-07-22

Awwwwwww,
great poem, but you are the luckiest guy not him, because a love like that is useless, You are great and you deserve someone great.
But i really felt the pain in that poem, so well written, so talanted.
The only wish I have is The girl read this and know what she missing is a great person.
5/5 as in always

ShhhhItsASecret© ( F P C D ) at 2006-07-22

Very full of emotion. I liked the story behind it. It was very sad. The flow was off a bit, and some of the rhymes seemed a tad bit forced, but all in all it was a good poem. My favorite stanza was:

"I lost myself in her world,
Even though I loved her a lot.
But what could I do?
My words were weaker than I thought."

Keep writing!! 4/5. Good job!

~BJ~

xDarkSuicidex ( F P C D ) at 2006-07-23

Not bad at all... I really liked it. It's a twist from the rest of the love poems you hear, eh?

And the way you keep calling him The Luckiest Guy In The World... I don't know why but that meant something to me. XD

Great poem.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

goddess-glamourpuss ( F P C D ) at 2006-07-23

This is llsweet and sad and despairing. I loved the way you framed it as a letter.
Especialy liked the final stanza.


O.o°•(¯`·._.·[© тσям ( F C D ) at 2006-07-23

The last lines were beautiful!
Its sweet and sad!
I loved it!



Truest Lies ( F P C D ) at 2006-07-24

Although the rhyming pattern of the poem was not flawless, there was still shaky emotion piercing through, heart-burning sorrow underneath brave words.
I must say I liked it, as it is a rather new concept for a poem.
Nice.

//T.L.//

farah ( F P C ) at 2006-07-24

Hmmmm..............if i comment it wont be very possitive......i know u don't want me to lie and i can't praise u for wat i think is nt true....the poem is ok........but i liked the other ones much better..i indeed liked the last four line of this poem...it was very strong..it was sad very sad.......ur not selfish Goran i know that much........by the way u write and express ur feeling..that much this poem proves....iam looking forward to more new poem


Catherine ( C D ) at 2006-07-24

I liked this poem, but I found soem of the rhymes really...not good. For example, alot of the time you rhymed 'you' with 'you' and i think that took away. Also, Loving and Asking don't rhyme.

Kaylee ( F P C D ) at 2006-07-25

Yes this poem is heartfelt, yes in a way it is sort of beautiful, but in reality the poem in itself is extremely repetitive and the girl you describe shows us nothing about her. The luckiest guy is alright. Maybe he is lucky. Maybe he doesn't deserve her. But how do we know that. You tell us more than you show. As a narrative it's alright. As a poem, it coould have been a bit more decent.

lexie ( P C D ) at 2006-07-25

Awwwww.that was soo amazing sweet.whoever this girl is she really doesnt kno how lucky she is.to have such a wonderful guy like you waiting for her.beautiful poem:D
keep it up
--lexie

goran ( F P C D ) at 2006-07-26

Kaylee, it supposed to be a poem, not a story :) and it is dear the luckiest guy not the luckiest girl, that s why no need to write about her. I think I have done that in other poems.
:)

Ashley at 2006-07-27

Hey this is kinda a sad poem..But it is really good...So keep up the good work!!!!


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