Comments

Angel ( F C D ) at 2006-08-01

Wow BEAUTIFUL! i really like it... you have such a way in expressing yourself... it has such a way that captivates people... the rhyming was great too... keep up the great work!

ps: if you hav time... read my Made in tears! :D

~angel~

Sean Allen ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-01

Certainly was an excellent use of descriptive language. The only thing I would have wanted different (this is a small change, and rather insignificant) is that you used the cloud metaphor in two parts of your poem, the 2nd and 3rd stanza, and I thought you could replace one of the cloud metaphors with a different one -- spice things up a bit.

¦●→sammycakes←●¦ ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-01

AWW! I loved this poem! Just LOVED it! Lol. I know I'm being a bit ecstatic >.< I liked the flow, and all the lines were almost the same length, which i sometimes have trouble doing lol. Keep it up! =) xoxo 5/5

Samantha

loretta Taylor ( F P C ) at 2006-08-01

Absolutely beautiful. I think this is one of your best works. Maybe its that I adore love poems, but it is actually that good. 5/5 keep up the good work Loretta

Samantha Hollywood ( F C D ) at 2006-08-01

Talee --
Aww, so cute! I loved this. The rhyming and the flow didn`t seem forced at all -- they were perfect! Your spelling and grammar, was flawless as well. =D. You did a wonderful job, as usual. Keep it up! 5/5

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

GarBear ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-01

"You had fallen from heaven straight into my arms,
Igniting my heart with your sweet seductive charms."

When you start out a poem like that u know u have somethin special evolving....wonderful wonderful amazing piece of ART!!

MaLuV4uIsEnDlEsS ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-01

This was a very nice love poem!!It made me think of how much love fills our lives..the flow was pretty good, just a bit off in some places, but over all it was very Cute=)

One~Last~Time (Noni) ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-01

Beautiful job, great descriptions too. Though it would be nice if you could somehow shorten your lines.

- ×·.d0ra ; ( F C ) at 2006-08-01

Hey darl a very touhing piece. beautifully written. such beautiful words. very well written. good job on this one. l0ved it xx

♥ Jєѕѕу ♥ ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-02

Lol.. that is so weird.. i could swear that i commented this before.. hmm.. lol.. anyways, it was an amazing poem! the flow was effortless and your rhymes were perfect.. the emotion was clear and your descriptions were b-e-a-u-t-i-f-u-l! loved it taleee! and as i have said before :P this WILL happen to you.. love youu!

xDarkSuicidex ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-02

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww! At the ends I got chills! How adorable! It's kind of long, but how adorable! So sweet, so tender, so perfect! Great Job!

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

TaperedDreams ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-04

Wow Nat, wow. This was absolutely amasing, don't you ever doubt your talent. I usuallly hate reading love poems, but this one was definately an exception, you wrote this so beautifully, and i loved every word. You are so talented! I love you

--Steph

...TILLmyLASTtearFALLS... ( F C ) at 2006-08-05

AwW,what a beautiful poem! Its one of the sweetest that ive read by far, indeed.The rhyming was great and the ending was so cute! I really loved this poem.You are a wonderful writer, girl!Great work, keep writing like that!
Best wishes,

TILLmyLASTtearFALLS

donna ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-05

Excellent poem.. very sweet and extremely well written 5/5 xx

Zack O.o ( F C ) at 2006-08-07

You got an almostOttava Rime. Try to extend it you got ababcc try getting abababcc it will be better recognized by the poetic community.

Heidi-May ( F P C ) at 2006-08-07

Oh my gosh! i absolutely adored this piece. the writing was so brilliant and beautiful. i can't even use all the words to discribe how much i loved it, it was amazing. definatly keep it up, 100/5.

heidi may

Biscuit ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-07

A very good strong ending to a brilliant poem, i love your style of writing its very graceful and each of your poems explore something different. im going to add u to my favs as u r an insppiration to me :)

-biscuit-

Kylie ( C ) at 2006-08-07

I love your poem, this is one of my favourites. Very good work, i look forward to reading some of your other poems, well done!!

gabrielle.Xx ( F P C ) at 2006-08-08

Brilliant

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