Sean Allen ( F P C D )
at 2006-11-30
Hahaha i'm glad you mentioned annabel lee at the end, the entire time was reading your poem i was laughing at how you ripped it off! =P
Sean Allen ( F P C D )
at 2006-11-30
"The words they had said was so chilling"
'were' not 'was', since 'words' is plural
hikarikitti
at 2006-12-01
I concur with sempai, but you did leave out the part where he goes to her grave and stays with her. They had a word for people like him back in the days. They were called MEN
haha i'm just kidding. good rhyme scheme though. 4 pts. from me. -1 cuz i didn't really like that one repetitive line about the prophets
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