Comments - The One You Forgot

...♀Loving Him♂... ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-04

This was a well written poem. there was something in that that everyone can relate to at one point or another. great work darling.

-/2 Terra

Rachel Barnett ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-05

This is a heartfelt poem pouring with emotion. Great job! 5/5.

heather ( C ) at 2007-01-07

When i read ur poems i enjoy them so much i wanna read them all! ahh! ive gotta get off this computer and do some things but i keep jus reading them! lol

Lyndsay Kalyta ( F P C ) at 2007-01-09

"Youre everything in life to me
the reason why i want to breathe"

This is just brillant, fell in love with these lines, you're good!

*Gem* ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-14

The flow on this one was excellent, i think everyone has felt this way once or twice.

"It's just the way life sometimes goes
You can't escape all its blows."

I'd just an 'of' after all to clear it up a bit. But it's just a suggestion, it works fine without it.

I loved the wording you used on this one, simple words convey a strong message
Well done
5/5
*Gem*

~ANtoNiA~ ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-16

I loved this poem!!!! i could really relate to it!!!!!! u really showed good emotions! 5/5

Krzysztof J. ( F P C ) at 2007-01-17

I dont know what to say.. Im speachless.. from the start i was like wow this is simply perfect.. this poem is amazingly perfect... 99/5

bridget edwards ( C D ) at 2007-01-22

Hey thank you sooo much for entering this poem in my contest!! i really enjoyed reading it, i think it is such a powerful love poem. I like how it has good flow, and how it rhymes.. i love poems that rhyme :).. I think it was a very strong ending, especially because of how you repeated that line you used at the start. So i rate this poem 5/5.. well done xox

heather ( C ) at 2007-01-24

I really Njoyed this poem. well written!!!!!

michelle ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-29

Wow!! great poem......heartfelt...i can relate...good job!

TheWorldFell&UWerentThere ( F P C D ) at 2007-02-15

5/5. Amazing poem. Yeah school wouldnt let me do love poems but im at home now. I really liked how you had written this poem!! I enjoyed it. I kind of have a poem thats kinda like this it's called Played Heart. But idk. My poems arent very good. Great job on this one.

becca ♥ ( F P C D ) at 2007-02-17

COMMENT # 4

another really good one.. some stanzas better than others flow wise. but word choice is wonderful.. once again.. :D and i LOVE how you repeated part of the first stanza at the end..

Infected With his Deadly Love ( F P C D ) at 2007-02-18

Another great poem. I really enjoy your poems. Keep it up 5/5

disturbed one ( F P C D ) at 2007-02-21

Wow great job =D again u amaze me =)

5/5

lost & lonely nevermore at 2007-04-23

Loved it and i so get what it means 5/5 "smiles"

Midnight Sun ( F P C D ) at 2007-06-17

Comment #3:

Man, Charisma! You are such a talented writer. I mean your work is professional and completely heartfelt. I can only hope to become a writer like you one day. Such amazing, tear-jerking work. Amazing job!
~Midnight Sun

just me ( F C ) at 2007-08-30

It's beautiful, truely. Once again I can relate. I dont want my ex to ever forget me because i know i won't ever forget him. There's a quote that goes, "I must have been stupid to think that lil old me could rock your effin world" I hope i rocked his enough that he wont forget me. lol.
I love this.
<3
L.C

<<<Did i ever tell u ur simply amazing?>>>

oksana at 2007-09-02

I really like this poem its really good !!! cheak mine out some time and commet them thanx!
<3

HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-21

Love this piece, absolutely love it. I think that the repetition of the lines:

"But I'm shaking at the very thought
Of being the one you forgot."

really helped, these lines really stood out to me and helped pull me in that much more, great job.

5.5
:]

Becca ( F P C D ) at 2007-10-27

5/5! I liked this. I can relate.


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